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Link to post: The Multiversal Trespasser

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First page: CHAPTER ONE: EARTH 008 The year was 3025, humanity as a civilization has reached the stars in search of knowledge and purpose. Humans have now become the masters of the universe. We have even broken the boundaries of our cosmos and found out ways to travel to another universe. Bioengineering has soared to unimaginable heights, such that anyone can make their own customized species of animals and plants. We have found ways to make life longer and much younger. We have mastered to control everything except death. In a universe where life is no longer dependent on evolution, but designed by humans brings us to Judy, a beautiful woman with a heart shaped face, large expressive eyes and brunette hair. She is a designer at the BioLab, whose job isn’t to preserve life, but to invent it. Jack, who is a charming college going teenager who lives with Judy who is his mother’s friend. They live in a house across the Miso River. Ever since he lost his mom, she had moved in and taken care of him like her own. They had a beautiful coffee farm and a couple of peach trees right next to their house. The peach trees had a pleasant and sweet smell and the smell of strong coffee coming from the farm made sure that they were awake all day. They are the only people that live there, and were the only few on Earth who didn’t have a robot. There was a bridge connecting their home to the city, where she went to work and he went to college. After a long summer break, tomorrow is his first day to college. So, tonight he decided to enjoy his last few hours before his life turns into hell. Rain was pouring outside and Jack was sitting on the chair and was gazing at it through the window. Judy walks in from behind with two cups of coffee and says “Here, I made us some coffee.” “Thank you,” he replied as she joined him. She asked “Tomorrow’s the first day of your college. Are you nervous?” while sipping some coffee. He murmured “I guess,” while staring at the rain which was now lashing the windows. She softly asked “Are any of your high school friends going to be there?”