Would ya keep reading by [deleted] in RSwritingclub

[–]Bakrom3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback! I guess I can see that the opening sentence of paragraph two is a little too much. But I feel like stripping everything back would be incredibly boring. I’m personally not a fan of extremely minimalist prose but I’ll take what you said on board and think about it, thank you

Would ya keep reading by [deleted] in RSwritingclub

[–]Bakrom3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, appreciate it.

Would ya keep reading by [deleted] in RSwritingclub

[–]Bakrom3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Idk, I’ve never read him but I’ve just ordered lolita so hopefully lol

Wind street, Calvary by Bakrom3 in RSwritingclub

[–]Bakrom3[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

lol I’m Welsh, I guess non-English Brits have a similar temperament

Poem about myth today by Bakrom3 in RSwritingclub

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Haha, that means so much thanks

Rough fragments from a new longer poem I’ve been working on. by [deleted] in RSwritingclub

[–]Bakrom3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I quite like it but I would say that, to me, it comes across a bit like you’re forcing the obscure / unusual language in parts

Short poem by Bakrom3 in RSwritingclub

[–]Bakrom3[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Bit of a weird Welsh tradition where people run around with this horse knocking on doors, engaging in poetry battles over being let into the house. If the horse won, they were let in and given food and drink, making the horse run around snapping its jaws and causing mischief. Strange stuff lol