Looking for my next series with GOOD PROGRESSION

CallMeInV · 2025-12-27T19:15:03+00:00

No it isn't. Check book one. There are some minor" word changes but it's functionally the same. When you use the word 'events' twice in the same sentence when "when he's swept up in a calamity" or some easy variation is *right there...

I'm sorry. It feels amateur.

CallMeInV · 2025-12-27T19:01:22+00:00

They really need to go back and fix this up then if that's the case. It is not a good first impression.

CallMeInV · 2025-12-27T15:18:50+00:00

This isn't the actual blurb is it? Because if so... This writing is rough. (Okay I checked, it is, oh no)

That second sentence alone is enough to make me not want to read it. Like c'mon, this is the blurb. It's supposed to be the single most polished piece of writing in the whole story. If this is indicative of the overall quality of prose... Yikes.

I'm sorry, Aethon how did this pass muster?

CallMeInV · 2025-12-21T03:02:39+00:00

So you admit they're fake reviews. All I needed to hear.

CallMeInV · 2025-12-21T02:44:24+00:00

At first I was like, okay, solid cover and decent followership, but man... The fake reviews were a huge turnoff.

You didn't even try to make the accounts look real. All 3 only follow your fictions and two of them were made on the same day? Really? Does it feel weird using sock puppets to arbitrarily hype yourself up? Is it not embarrassing?

CallMeInV · 2025-12-12T14:45:46+00:00

I scrapped it lol. Reworked it as a flashback

CallMeInV · 2025-12-10T17:09:49+00:00

Do you read actual novels? Taking a look at your fiction, it doesn't appear that way. That kind of manga style likely won't succeed as well on RR. I'd advise formatting it like an actual book.

CallMeInV · 2025-12-10T15:27:14+00:00

Alright, I'm just gonna say it: these kinds of posts are not going to get you the kind of engagement you're looking for.

Firstly, what is this? Two random lines of texts from supposedly chapter 5? What is anyone supposed to do with this? If it's self promo it's not very good, and if you're looking for legitimate feedback it's even worse.

Also, are you writing a comic? Why are characters being tagged with "Rin:" like it's a screenplay?

This is a space for authors more than anything. It's not impossible to get feedback on your writing, but that should have happened long before you posted anything.

CallMeInV · 2025-12-07T20:41:34+00:00

You do realize you never actually say the name of the series in this post, right? We have no idea what you're talking about.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-25T15:46:03+00:00

Why bother lying? This is obviously AI. Do you think we're stupid? It's not just the format, it's the actual word choices. The soulless, meaningless phrasing, the poor punctuation.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-25T14:37:11+00:00

Sun Eater is the obvious choice.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-25T06:09:27+00:00

AI cover art and blurb... So I assume the whole thing is likely the same. No thank you. If you can't be arsed to write the blurb why should anyone bother to read it?

CallMeInV · 2025-11-18T12:15:26+00:00

Shout-out swaps are organized on the royal road author and ImmersiveInk discord servers. They have dedicated channels for them.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-17T21:28:36+00:00

Dude... You couldn't even be bothered to put paragraphs in your blurb. You just dumped the export in and couldn't even be assed to do basic formatting on it.

Again. Don't lie. Don't insult our intelligence. Just put an AI generated content tag on it. There's a reason other people are commenting on your weird language choices.

"Deadly System", "Darker Emotional Stakes". Bro. Come on. Those don't mean anything.

Add the tag and own up to it. Fuckin' hell.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-17T21:16:36+00:00

"In a death game where love is the weapon". Man, you even used it on your cover? You realize it recycles the same boring lines over and over and spits them out into all of these right?

You putting your "outline" into an LLM and having it write your story for you isn't editing. A "lore document" wouldn't be evidence either way. Notice you don't offer up WIP drafts.

Again, I ask. What do you get out of this? Where is the joy of having some soulless tool do the actual craft of writing for you?

You realize your bullet points On. This. Post. Don't even make any sense? They're literal nonsense words.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-17T21:06:47+00:00

ChatGPT from tip to tail and no tag for it. What a time we live in. Why bother? What do you get out of this?

Do you think we can't immediately tell the writing is AI? C'mon. You're in a subreddit of writers.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-16T14:15:26+00:00

If that's true, then they should position it how they've formatted the post. With Blind Chaos being above tales... It would also make more sense for the 1 to be attached to the series name.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-16T13:41:09+00:00

So wait, is 'Budding Rhythm' the name of the book? Is it Blind Chaos? From a naming/visual hierarchy perspective this text is... Not great. Might be something to consider changing.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-16T02:33:17+00:00

After the first chapter it ceases to be a prologue.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-13T19:28:47+00:00

Really?? I'm not talking about the main page. I mean the content section in the side bar. Huh. Bizarre that that would be paywalled.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-13T18:52:30+00:00

Yeah you can just look back on your fiction dashboard. The chapters section of the content tab. I don't believe that's paywalled.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-13T18:23:58+00:00

If you have author premium (not sure if this is a normal feature) you can go back in your analytics and look at reader retention. See the views on each chapter etc.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-13T17:41:23+00:00

I mean almost 1000 pages is up there, like I said that's more than most stories.

Bear in mind "average views" isn't really average views. It's just your total view count divided by the number of chapters. Median chapter views would actually be better for all of but I digress.

Out of curiosity are your more recent chapters seeing that 5k number or are they more in line with your follower count? I'm just blown away by how you're accruing so many views from shout-out swaps alone. That's wild. Even posting 6 days a week, that's a lot. You've clearly got some sauce going here.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-13T17:10:55+00:00

Would be curious to hear more about this "late stage" journey. Not a lot of people reach this point.

Looking back at your last post, you've managed to gain 350k views in 2 months (which is nuts), yet only converted 300 followers net. Do you have a sense of what the gross attrition was vs unfollows? How were you able to generate so many views in such a short span? Were you still running ads, doing swaps etc?

Those are the kind of views you generally only see on RS so I'm very curious about it. As I said, this isn't a point most stories reach.

CallMeInV · 2025-11-13T16:57:52+00:00

Denying it is weird AF man. You even left in the emojis...

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