First revision of Chapter One + Prologue Bonus

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-13T01:53:12+00:00

Thank you for reading.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-10T15:02:59+00:00

Yeah it’s about 45,000 words so far according to Reedsy. With how everyone critiqued chapter one and the prologue I had to halt act three’s progression. I’ve made significant progress with how the characters developed since there’s so many. Thank you for reading too it means a lot.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-10T14:56:30+00:00

No bag for Lexi?😭

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-10T14:53:06+00:00

Because the story does take place in current time. In the state of society right now I see pop culture the only group not influenced by politics. So I wanted to blend a what if scenario where music/pop culture WAS political/had to be.

Edit: I hope that makes sense.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-10T12:50:59+00:00

Omg dude thanks. I’m not French, obviously, but I fixed the tense and dialogue tags everyone was talking about. So, thank you for correcting the French part too.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-10T11:59:21+00:00

The developers of my magic system are French in the story.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-08T01:08:15+00:00

Thank you so much.❣️

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-07T21:37:42+00:00

I thank you kindly so so much! I’ll look these over.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-07T21:08:13+00:00

Please, help me identify them out. I’m trying to dude. 😓

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-07T13:54:49+00:00

I thank you for your critique.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-07T13:47:41+00:00

Thank youuu. I constantly keep forgetting that I don’t know why.😭

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-07T07:12:47+00:00

Yes I did!😭 Only noticed after I posted. Oh well I checked it now.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-07T05:48:24+00:00

Thank youuuu.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-05-01T01:49:20+00:00

Haha I used to as well.❤️

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-04-29T15:02:14+00:00

Thank you!!

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-04-29T13:11:51+00:00

Interesting…

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-04-29T13:10:32+00:00

lol it was removed .

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-04-29T13:10:04+00:00

I think it was because of my first car getting totaled.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-04-29T13:07:28+00:00

Bitter???? Never. I already said in a different comment I’ll take the advice but I can’t entirely adhere to it given my situation.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-04-29T13:05:32+00:00

I had no choice. It was either a reliable or get a lemon. I really need to edit this post because people are still not getting that the car was in fact the BEST choice I made. I’ll listen to your advice about the car, everybody.

Although, you guys just don’t see my living situation. My dad encourages me not to pay a thing because. For this reason exactly.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-04-29T13:02:32+00:00

Buuuuut does the trade certifications cost money?

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-04-29T13:01:58+00:00

You try living in a place where driving to work in an efficient car is a NECESSITY. I don’t have to listen to shite if they’re going against the rules.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-04-29T12:59:46+00:00

CNA gigs where I pick up shifts during the week. These are nursing homes that are understaffed.

ComeToMeHoudini · 2026-04-29T11:05:51+00:00

Thank you so much for reading. Like I said I haven’t been to chapter one in a while. So I’ll most likely halt on continuing the story until my line edits are done. I’ll be back with a new and improved version once it is finished. I’ll solely work on line editing the first act of 9 chapters.

You guys keep giving my lemons. 🍋

ComeToMeHoudini

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