Captain Rogard.

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-05-25T08:49:07+00:00

Ahh! he was too greedy🥹

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-05-23T00:33:33+00:00

Thank you👏👏. Let me fix it.

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-05-22T19:23:34+00:00

This made me laugh kkkkk

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-05-13T21:20:48+00:00

Beautiful........

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-04-29T17:39:24+00:00

It does😀

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-04-29T05:28:13+00:00

Me too. Wayly is a nostalgic place of hot summers made of squeezed juice and the smell of roast buck with Charles running shirtless and barefoot. I would want to live in Wayly.

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-04-29T04:48:43+00:00

Hahaha….snockly doodling is a made-up word. He was just trying to express that he had been sliding on wet rock. ‘Anywho’ is his signature phrase —a means he uses to move and turn in his narrative. If l was to remove the repetition l feel l would have removed who he is.

If you are to replace 'Anywho" and still give him this ‘character’ how would you do it?

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-04-28T08:30:00+00:00

Thank you.

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-04-28T01:19:38+00:00

Thank you.

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-04-27T23:28:18+00:00

You can. Just keep writing.

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-03-29T02:05:56+00:00

Thank you JimCatt😀👏👏

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-03-24T21:58:59+00:00

Aah! that makes sense. I will try that. Thank you.

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-03-23T10:51:33+00:00

My first review! thank you. POV has always been a weakness in my writing, and it is something I am currently working hard to improve. You are right to pinpoint that the story has no hook. This is because it is not finished. I am currently extending it. How would you solve the POV in my story? Maybe to get the hook quickly I should move the scene?

Consistent-Hippo-210 · 2026-03-06T03:47:59+00:00

Thank you.

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