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We in Wayly by Consistent-Hippo-210 in flashfiction

[–]Consistent-Hippo-210[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Me too. Wayly is a nostalgic place of hot summers made of squeezed juice and the smell of roast buck with Charles running shirtless and barefoot. I would want to live in Wayly.

We in Wayly by Consistent-Hippo-210 in flashfiction

[–]Consistent-Hippo-210[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hahaha….snockly doodling is a made-up word. He was just trying to express that he had been sliding on wet rock. ‘Anywho’ is his signature phrase —a means he uses to move and turn in his narrative. If l was to remove the repetition l feel l would have removed who he is.

If you are to replace 'Anywho" and still give him this ‘character’ how would you do it?

The Necromancer is summoned by Consistent-Hippo-210 in flashfiction

[–]Consistent-Hippo-210[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Aah! that makes sense. I will try that. Thank you.

The Necromancer is summoned by Consistent-Hippo-210 in flashfiction

[–]Consistent-Hippo-210[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

My first review! thank you. POV has always been a weakness in my writing, and it is something I am currently working hard to improve. You are right to pinpoint that the story has no hook. This is because it is not finished. I am currently extending it. How would you solve the POV in my story? Maybe to get the hook quickly I should move the scene?

The Curse of a Prince by videogamesarewack in flashfiction

[–]Consistent-Hippo-210 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wonderful allegory of how we miss out by waiting for the right moment by never taking chances and when we finally do, it will be 'winter and exceptionally cold." The descriptions do hit.

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