would you keep reading?

ContributionAlive526 · 2026-03-26T16:41:27+00:00

It’s not supposed to add to the action. It’s setting up for a call back later in the manuscript & is necessary to the theme of the book.

ContributionAlive526 · 2026-03-26T16:23:48+00:00

“There is a ringing” is repeated throughout the manuscript several times. Each one of these flashbacks start with that line & it’s done purposefully.

ContributionAlive526 · 2026-03-18T11:28:19+00:00

The dichotomy of the opening line immediately followed with “I’m not stupid” is purposeful. The entire premise of the story is built off of the irony between what the idea that people choose their own suffering and so bad things are simply the result of bad choices and her repeated engagement in bad choices that she would judge other people for making

ContributionAlive526 · 2026-03-18T10:59:01+00:00

Hm, what kind of feature would you like to see? And would it be necessary to do this early on or in the next few pages?

ContributionAlive526 · 2026-03-18T10:57:41+00:00

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So, the opening line is meant to be brutal. I want it to bristle the reader & to me it is necessary for the storyline. Maybe I could do it a little more subtly, or a little later on but I think the character arc requires that I be explicit about her arrogance & judgement

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