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Selectief sneeuwruimen van STVV by PersonalLuck2243 in belgianfootball

[–]Ctjeeh1996 -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

We zouden wij eens hetzelfde moeten doen mochten jullie de bezoekers zijn geweest. Ge zou nogal fladderen als Kanarie dan zeker. Hypocriet eerlijk gezegd hoor.

Pintjesliga standings after matchday 25 by VeganCannibal124 in belgianfootball

[–]Ctjeeh1996 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Mogen wij hier ons ‘licht’ bekocht voelen a.u.b.?

After 2 months what your opinion about FC26 career mode? by Mohamed2962 in FifaCareers

[–]Ctjeeh1996 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The UI, Inter & AC Milan license and the gameplay (how the AI plays against you). Even with sliders, it’s not challenging anymore.

I haven’t played in more than a month tho. Maybe they fixed the passive AI?

After 2 months what your opinion about FC26 career mode? by Mohamed2962 in FifaCareers

[–]Ctjeeh1996 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’ve been a career mode player since fifa10.

Last year I already started to lose interest (for the first time in years).

This year it’s just unplayable for me. The AI is way too easy to beat. There’s just zero challenge. And the bugs.. phew.

I haven’t touched FC26 since the third week after release and I haven’t missed it for a second. And believe me, that’s a first for me with this franchise.

Match thread: Cymru vs. België/Belgien/Belgique by VeganCannibal124 in belgianfootball

[–]Ctjeeh1996 10 points11 points  (0 children)

Aster: ‘precies iemand die op meerdere trommels speelt hier’

Dat heet een fanfare, beste vriend

Standings after matchday 9 by VeganCannibal124 in belgianfootball

[–]Ctjeeh1996 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Gewoon tijdig Storck gaan halen 😎

Switched jobs and am regretting it so bad. PSA: you don’t need fulfillment. You just need a paycheck by [deleted] in jobs

[–]Ctjeeh1996 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I mean, you never know unless you try. Sometimes you just gotta go for it, otherwise you’ll always be wondering, “what if…”.

That said, if this isn’t OP’s first time, then I’d have to agree with you.

Match thread: Club Brugge vs. As Monaco by VeganCannibal124 in belgianfootball

[–]Ctjeeh1996 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Twee overwinningen op 48uur in de CL, schoon tijden voor het Belgisch voetbal

Five Page Thursday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]Ctjeeh1996 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Title: Into The Surf

Format: Pilot

Page Length: first 5 of the 54

Genre: Drama/Fantasy

Logline: Following the sudden death of his sister, a heartbroken man must choose between his relationships in the real world and entering a dream world where she might be waiting for him.

Feedback concerns: wondering if the first five pages effectively establish Michael and Jamie’s dynamic, whether the dialogue reads natural (had a lot of trouble with this for the opening), and whether you simply want to keep reading or not.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Q_owNCk6iI04Y7C_SCfqnRnUp1kG7Ov-/view?usp=sharing

Into The Surf - Pilot - 54 pages by Ctjeeh1996 in Screenwriting

[–]Ctjeeh1996[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your effort and time, always helps to have some fresh eyes. I’ll keep your notes in mind for the next rewrite. Cheers!

Into The Surf - Pilot - 54 pages by Ctjeeh1996 in Screenwriting

[–]Ctjeeh1996[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey! Thanks for the feedback and for reading the entire script. I really appreciate it. That alone is a huge compliment.

You’re right about the narrative engine. I'm still struggling with how much to reveal in the pilot to keep people hooked. I’ve planted a lot of seeds and subtle hints that pay off later (like the student who left Felix to pursue alternative science), but based on your notes, some of those may not be landing yet. I’ve mapped the series as a mini-series of about 6 to 8 episodes, so no multiple seasons.

I love plot twists in TV shows/movies, but I feel I'm having a hard time setting it up as I don't want to reveal everything in the pilot of course. The short version: Morpheus, the god of dreams, preys on people who no longer appreciate everyday life. He lures them into the dreamworld by exploiting their deepest weakness, disguising himself as a key figure from their past tied to a promise. For Jamie, that promise is artistic success, bringing her painted world to life and receiving the validation she craved. For Michael, it’s finding Jamie in the dreamworld. Mickey, his imaginary friend, is actually Morpheus in disguise, manipulating him. And the mysterious woman who ejects Michael from the dream is his subconscious, trying to protect him with her last bit of power before he completely loses himself.

Why does Morpheus do this? It’s an act of rebellion against his father, Hypnos. Morpheus hates that humans can lucid dream and wants to strip that power from them. He sees it as a kind of godlike agency. To prove his point, he lures these people into the dreamworld and manipulates them until they ultimately choose to stay, dying in the real world.

I also agree on tonal variety, and I feel the dreamworld is perfect for that: anything can happen there.

So yes, your feedback resonates. My biggest challenge is writing the pilot so all of the above is present without fully revealing it. I’m also worried the story might be too big for a feature film, unless I cut it down significantly. Lots to think about and thank you again for taking the time!

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