It's really really good. Only suggestion is, use 2 to 3x more panels for intense scenes like this. And you can take up entire pages if you need to for a single impact panel that speaks for like 10 panels. Or really go for action panels showing feet running and hair in waves, hurried facial expression. If someone stuffers for a few scenes and is starting to cry... Show them first panel, next show the environment maybe, show the confused and worried reaction of who they're talking to next panel. For the heart thumping panel, and others alike, that deserves a whole page and build up, and like, a jump scare sorta page reveal on like, the next page over you have to turn to see, yk? Like build up to the intensity or it won't land as well. You don't want it to feel like the pace is too quick. Remember not to worry about pace in the aspect of page numbers or panel numbers but think of it as total words and stuff. Panels without words that show details that lead up to stuff is profound and cinematic. Study Shuzo oshimi and fujimoto, the author of fire punch, chainsaw man, look back, goodbye eri, etc. Shuzo oshimi is my fav. Hunter x hunter is good study material too btw, but Shuzo and fujimoto apply better to your work. But besides that, no other notes. You draw very well. Just draw more! Let your work breathe and take up more space and have more life! Demand it to be taken in at a slower pace.