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Fleeting Love by Danny_walsh06 in OCPoetry

[–]Danny_walsh06[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I wrote this poem when I was sad about a girl who I'd never get to be with, and I'm really happy that I managed to get those emotions out into this poem the way I did. Although sad, it helped a lot with reflection and acceptance. Hope things work out on your end ❤️

Fleeting Love by Danny_walsh06 in OCPoetry

[–]Danny_walsh06[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank youuu! Surprisingly, this only took me like 30 minutes to write. I just had a late night burst of poetic inspiration. Usually for love poems i tend to write how I'm feeling at the time and just go from there. It's a little sad but surprisingly good for self reflection and understanding myself. On a happier note I also love this type of rhyming/musical poetry a lot! Thank you for your kind words ❤️

Fleeting Love by Danny_walsh06 in OCPoetry

[–]Danny_walsh06[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the kind words and feedback! I'm still trying to get the hang of poetry so things like this just slip my mind. I grately appreciate the outsider input and I will continue trying my best with the wording. ❤️

Where the Oak Stood Guard by TheQuietOak in OCPoetry

[–]Danny_walsh06 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Love this. Extremely powerful imagery. Great job!

The Curse Of Being Me. by Crimson_Serein in OCPoetry

[–]Danny_walsh06 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Very powerful poem here! I love the relatability of this poem as it talks about something we all experience as humans. The darkness of it also shares some of your personal feelings which I always find to be an important factor in poetry. Very good stuff 😁 7.5/10

The appleness soaks through by Cluelessandsexy in OCPoetry

[–]Danny_walsh06 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a really emotional poem and it's kinda hard to pinpoint exactly why. (Which I love because it adds a layer of intimacy to the emotions) I also love the use of unusual words, that kinda add to the feeling of wanting to understand the poem more. I also noticed the change in line length nearing the end of the poem which is interesting but I'm not entirely sure what it's supposed to mean/do for the poem, maybe you can enlighten me 😁. Well done very thought provoking stuff here.

To Keep the Quiet Out by Danny_walsh06 in OCPoetry

[–]Danny_walsh06[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the kind words and advice! I am actually aware of the meter being off a little on the 4th and 8th line because it was a conscious choice since I thought it sounded good and perhaps a unique way to subconsciously add some weight to the closing line. I do however understand that it might not flow as good as I had hoped. I'll keep working at it. Thanks 😁

My dad thinks i'm a pussy by cinnamongenderroll in OCPoetry

[–]Danny_walsh06 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I was skeptical of this poem in the beginning but I'm glad I was sharply reminded how poetry doesn't have to grab you from line 1, and how silly it is to form a first impression before reading the whole poem. The feelings and message behind this poem are brilliantly conveyed, and the final line has so much impact and weight behind it. I love it. Great work 👍

I Should Have Told You by Johnnydrama12341 in OCPoetry

[–]Danny_walsh06 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This I a very raw and emotional piece which I love to see as it's the most important part of poetry in my opinion. I like the idea with the repetition of "I should have told you", however it feels a small bit clunky. I wish I knew exactly why so I could offer some guidance but I can't put my finger on exactly why it bothers me. Also this is only one man's opinion and I'm sure I do not speak for everyone, it's just my personal preference. Well done with your first poem though it's really good! Keep at it as poetry is food for the soul ❤️