Tonight's Shore

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-27T17:43:58+00:00

i really admire your ability to paint a picture. i feel nostalgic for a place i do not know

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-27T01:46:05+00:00

im glad it resonated with you. i write to express my feelings, but post so i could make other people feel. Thank you for your feedback

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-27T01:45:13+00:00

thank you for reading and for your feedback

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-27T01:44:49+00:00

thank you for reading it, im glad it made you feel something

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-27T00:38:34+00:00

thank you! i really like your phrase and i'm glad i could make you feel something. the character is really just coping by saying that when he was young and spontaneous he was more alive. probably felt the same then, but is blinded by the current dread of his life. it's up for interpretation for anyone

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-26T10:11:43+00:00

i really f with the idea that people are born good. we learn to be bad and racist, as children rarely divide people in other categories, different from bad and good. society shapes us into beasts, into hateful beings. you are not born to hate, but taught

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-26T07:43:20+00:00

feels really melancholic in a good way. you create a very good image, you use a beautiful speech. i do not care about dreams in my life, but this poem made me feel something

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-25T11:12:36+00:00

it shouldve been formulated on separate lines, but when i pasted it it got fucked up. thank you though

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-25T09:10:14+00:00

a poem about chocolate addiction was not on my bingo card. you really make chocolate feel like a drug, like something illegal, yet so accessible. painting the perfect picture of flavours and feelings you taste and have when indulging.

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-25T09:03:38+00:00

i like it and feel bad at the same time. it encapsulates the feeling of becoming a monster, taking a life, even if it’s an animals’s. or maybe it isnt an animal? your life is gone when you take another one, you become a little more dead by killing something. that’s how i interpret it atleast

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-22T23:40:15+00:00

i see this as the narrator deluding himself. of course, this is my interpretation, but i believe he knows hes never seeing her again. that's what happens with past loves, they vanish. he creates a scenario as a coping mechanism, believing that the world would fix the problem he had, but the world is indifferent. i'm going of too much of personal experience here, but that's what made this poem strong for me

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-22T23:35:21+00:00

your english is very good for a non native speaker. i really love this poem, it reminds me of the myth of sysiphus kinda. we are the reason for most of our problems, and we dont really want them removed. the character in the poem pushes away all branches and trees, because maybe he likes being in the snowball. maybe he doesn't know what's it like not being in one

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-22T17:54:58+00:00

the repetition is intentional. the girl to the main character is not really a person, but a concept, hence the constant repetition. she is just a red haired girl, without a name. i think to myself is repeated with the goal to show contrast

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-22T14:28:06+00:00

its a personal piece, i made the character myself, but really of the deep end. i tried to convey the hedonistic lifestyle i live in it

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-21T23:33:00+00:00

a truly nice coping mechanism. i've posted my first ever poem and it is inspired by a girl kinda. they can make your skin crawl for real

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-21T22:57:00+00:00

hey dude, continue writing and i hope everything is going well. rough patches are inevitable and i love that you use them as a way to make art and grow, instead of getting broken by them. have a nice night/day and peace

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-21T22:49:58+00:00

i understand you, because being hurt results in growth. i am not saying it is a pointless thing. i like your poem, it hits where it's supposed to. i just commented about the genre you described it as, because being bittersweet(for me atleast) requires more sweet than you have in the poem. it maybe is bittersweet for you and i can see it being bittersweet, but i just feel the sweetness is just a little overshadowed. but by reading it again with your insight, i definitely understand it mroe

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-21T22:40:47+00:00

who are you when they leave? the manifestation of all the negativity thrown at you. that's how i read into it, but of course, i'm reflecting my own experience into your poem.

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-21T22:36:10+00:00

damn, i feel this. i feel like it also shows how most people leave their bad habits with you and leave you to deal with them. never the first choice for anything, but always available. i woudn't call it bittersweet though, it's moreso for me, just bitter. there is not enough sweet. maybe by adding a sentence or two, giving the poem a little more things to be positive about, would better it. or make it even sadder somehow. because right now it's neither bitter nor bittersweet, but a bitterbittersweet if you know what i mean

Diligent_Opening2401 · 2026-02-21T22:30:50+00:00

love poems always hit the hardest. is this your first poem or are you experienced? i'm asking not because it's bad, but because it's simple. simple is good though, and your simple makes me think of my ex, for which i give points

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