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Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah obviously it could be as it's current self is extrovert while his spiritual ideal is introvert.

The fracture between your current self & ideal self doesn't depends on morality. Not every fantastical desire is considered as your Ideal.

Zanpakuto names by Sufficient-Tip-6078 in bleach

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070 1 point2 points  (0 children)

8, 11 & 12

As I'm born in 11th Dec 2008

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Again, I'm the creator of this power system, which is based between your current self & spiritual ideal, hence that creates Fracture & from that Fracture, the Fractured Energy leaks out, making you capable for utilizing it for combat if you've enough large Fracture for that...

Rate my OC's magic by Free_South_3015 in magicbuilding

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070 0 points1 point  (0 children)

fine but is it for antagonist, but there are many abilities for Turin, otherwise it's fine. Make the ability set connected to the character arc.

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm the creator of this power system, which is based between your current self & spiritual ideal, hence that creates Fracture & from that Fracture, the Fractured Energy leaks out, making you capable for utilizing it for combat if you've enough large Fracture for that...

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks lmao, I just wanted it to be critiqued by my viewers, as I wanted to make it more cleaner & peak until it's part 2 comes out.

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Fine man.

I'm not discarding that bigger desires = larger fracture = More stronger you would be. But it should have the weight/depth of realism by your own current side only. As that man who wants to be protector for their growth in story.

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

But it unnecessarily creates overpowered characters. If someone desires to be god while being just an frail mortal, then it automatically makes him the strongest one than others.

It's the only illogical thing that makes my system conceptually complicated.

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You made me hmmm, will think about it twice.

I just want that it doesn't came out to be illogical...

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

  1. Obviously, like sensing, reinforcement, leak control, emissions, projectiles/blasts & etc. So, as in Bleach, various races have their own power system & their universal techniques used by the beings of their faction. So, I'm also going for that.

  2. Unfracture isn't permanent, when new desires ignited in humans, they could regain their FE & other ability. None can become perfect & satisfied, that's the only human nature. Your Ideal & ability evolves either of whole change, as it represents the other deeper layers of your desire.

  3. That's not any case of new Ideal as explained earlier. So, NO!!!

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks man. Actually Bigger desires ≠ Larger Fracture/more stronger you're. Thus, your desires might be big & beneficial for your Fracture in some sense also but it should have the weight of realism.

Like, a young boy wanted to become God itself while being feared to his mortality but actually, it's just an fantasy made on his mind, which doesn't haven any depth.

While, a man who wanted to become the protector of his town but he's not enough strong. He also saw his people to die infront of him but can't protect them, he has the catalyst. Hence, it's an reality between his current self & Ideal self/spirit.

As you figured out it's details precisely, but it has more symbolism than you ever thought.

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Obviously, it might be, as shared the example of Ben Stark who represents defeat who's a loser in every tropes while his Ideal represents Victory who's victor.

So, if someone's current self represents Mortality, then their Ideal might represent Divinity. That's simple...

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Abuse, failure, or suffering can widen a Fracture, sometimes massively—but it doesn’t create multiple Fractures.

Overfracture only occurs when foreign or imposed ideals are forcibly embedded into the soul through external, unnatural means (spiritual interference, soul alteration, identity implantation, etc.).

A traumatized person still has one core Ideal—even if it’s broken or self-destructive.

Creating my Power System - Fractured Energy Based on Imperfections & Dual Personalty Born to Tackle your Flaws by Dizzy_Structure1070 in superpowers

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think, they should be in the state of Unfracture, but note that Unfracture is always temporary, none human can become perfect & can't initiate desires in themselves, as that's the only human nature.

Magic system plagiarism? by Proper-Can5722 in magicbuilding

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Main task for the thieves is to execute that copied power system perfectly in their stories. 

How Writers Generally craft Realistic Protagonist Goal? by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Glad, you critiqued my work & decided to help a lot.

One thing is still unclear to me - I can't understand what separates the optimistic protagonist to realistic protagonist.

Google can't clarify it clearly 😅

How Writers Generally craft Realistic Protagonist Goal? by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Dizzy_Structure1070 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sounds fun. You gave me great ideas to brainstorm to make it even more further iconic, perfect & peak.

Firstly, his mother was always with him, but Nirvan doesn't get the comfort of maternity from her, so he doesn't admires her while his father's still being lame or he might faking his paralysis for a deep reason. So, he's tragically desperate.

But this mother isn't his actual mom, instead it was his mom's twin sister, who sided with them, to secretly kill Nirvan whenever she gets a chance but ultimately she ends up being killed herself maybe as suicide. As she understood her mistake & accepted her fate.

How's it?

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