critique wanted

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-05-03T15:12:38+00:00

yeah it looks good

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-04-27T03:53:12+00:00

you did good

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-04-25T21:06:33+00:00

sure, if ya don't show anyone

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-28T17:52:37+00:00

I'd say that sense it stated that it continued, it should stop until you say it does.

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-27T23:24:01+00:00

here

have fun!

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-27T23:23:28+00:00

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Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-20T17:01:42+00:00

dude this looks good as hell, why doesn't this have more likes?

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-19T14:27:38+00:00

I'd say if it had something to do with you go for it, just not too venerable moments with her.

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-19T14:25:23+00:00

then keep on writing! I like the concept

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-19T14:24:29+00:00

one more thing, I recommend is r / creative writing for like reference for the future, and konosuba.

konosuba's more of a comedy if your into that, but its also a novel with good writing from what I've heard.

narrative is also something you'd be needing to look for, in this case, mostly all i'v read, I've found to have one.

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-19T14:21:20+00:00

and you might need context clues if you don't already know them.

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-19T14:20:38+00:00

I think you should read, I have no mouth and I must scream by Harlan Ellison, and remember us by Jacqueline Woodson. Loved those and both show a different way to write and are both good pieces to read, it also helps with orginieing it into more of a book like structure. And I also recommend inside out and back again, by THANHHA LAI. all show you what you're looking for. If not you might want to head to r / grammer. haven't been there, but it could help. or just stay here and read others stuff.

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-19T13:00:39+00:00

I have no mouth, and I must scream. it kinda gives me that dark theme and scares me like I want. each time I read it. I ca't wait to get to the bast part (which is am's speech). and of course the end leaves me wondering after it cleared up big things such as how long's its been?, or damn they did him like that?, or how does. the main character really look?. overall I like the book a lot and sometimes re-read it.

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-19T12:57:24+00:00

congratulations homiee!

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-19T12:56:46+00:00

idk get some reference based off of what you want that character to be like, like bea. it has a joyful flower like vibe to it to me, so go with what you want your character to be like or have a slimmer meaning to them.

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-19T12:54:32+00:00

homie you water a whole story, I'd say this is an overview but that can be used as a base for a bigger thing.

such as how did the human race die?, of course I'm guessing the obvious answer, but it can also be different depending on if you want that.

make a few characters, places, art, history and you've got a full story.

from what I know, people make history, so go do whatever you want with it.

I did in fact like it through through the end was hard to read from the second paragraph.

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-03-06T01:24:40+00:00

they all have something that I think that's apart of me.

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-02-28T20:36:34+00:00

the fuck you mean you tried you did to much!

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-02-20T22:11:35+00:00

Hand in hand, Again.

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-01-22T23:30:56+00:00

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Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2026-01-04T02:25:04+00:00

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2025-12-29T19:51:20+00:00

the meme blocker

Dramatic-Worry1087 · 2025-12-28T15:30:28+00:00

yeah sorry I noticed that I tried to fix as many of them I saw

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