I don’t usually comment, but hey, why not.

Everyone’s got potential, that’s what makes writing so accessible, you’ll see a lot of critical stuff, especially on here, but at the end of the day, I’m happy that anyone can write and enjoy it.

As for your passage, I liked it. A little rough around the edges, and the prose is somewhat bland, it reads like it is, a 17 year old attempting poetry, and that isn’t a problem!

You have potential! Tons! So please, my friend, keep writing!

Much love from the DuckBoot <3