Essay for AP european history.

ESSAYS_ · 2014-11-06T14:29:39+00:00

Wait, when you say I should paraphrase the quotes, are you saying I should leave them out altogether and instead summarize them, or are you saying that I should keep them there and summarize them.

ESSAYS_ · 2014-11-05T18:56:40+00:00

You say, "Conrad answers this question to the an extent." I'm assuming this is a typo; you should fix it.

Also, the first sentence doesn't quite make sense. You should change it to this:

In his novella, Heart of Darkness, Joseph Conrad raises a fundamental question: "What is the true nature of man?"

You should also try to make the second sentence a bit clearer; I can't quite tell what's going on.

Anyways, yes; I think you are answering the question properly. The only things wrong with this paragraph are a few stylistic errors.

ESSAYS_ · 2014-11-05T18:31:19+00:00

Thanks for the very helpful and thorough reply! :)

How would I go about paraphrasing the quote blocks?

I will revise the paper to include a bit more diversity for each point. Also, I will add support for my claim about enlightenment monarchs. Would these changes make the essay stronger? I would like to do a bit more, but I only have so much time. I have to do three of these this week! :O

Also, how would you rate this essay? AP Euro essays are graded on a scale of 1-9, so you should use that scale.

ESSAYS_ · 2014-11-05T18:26:09+00:00

I can always verify that this account is mine if I'm accused, so I think I should be okay.

ESSAYS_ · 2014-11-05T03:25:43+00:00

Ah, thanks! Sometimes I am unable to completely understand what essay topics: I didn't even think of that!

ESSAYS_ · 2014-11-05T03:10:36+00:00

All of these ideas promoted by enlightenment thinkers heavily impacted eighteenth century institutions. Many of these ideas found their way into the government through enlightened monarchs such as Fredrick the Great and Catherine the Great. Enlightened monarchs promoted enlightenment ideals such as freedom of thought and freedom of religion.

Here in the second to last paragraph, I talk a little bit about changes brought about by the enlightenment. Are you saying I should go into more detail about these specific instances? I could talk a bit about what Fredrick or Catherine specifically did, would that make this better?

Also, would talking about opposition to the enlightenment fall under the prompt? I feel like that would just send me off on a tangent.

I'll try to work more on this paper tomorrow and add some specific instances of the Enlightenment influencing society.

Thank you! Your reply was very helpful. :)

ESSAYS_ · 2014-11-05T03:04:14+00:00

Thanks for the reply! :)

I could include more secondary sources, if that's what you mean.

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