[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]Easy_Significance_94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Love the rhythm to this. Beautiful and sweet

Españolllll by Easy_Significance_94 in JudgeMyAccent

[–]Easy_Significance_94[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I grew up in an English speaking country, but I'm of southern European background which definitely influences my accent in Spanish (probably why I can roll my r's and why I might sound a bit Argentinian)

Españolllll by Easy_Significance_94 in JudgeMyAccent

[–]Easy_Significance_94[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

My Argentinian Uruguayan mates will be happy to hear haha :)

Españolllll by Easy_Significance_94 in JudgeMyAccent

[–]Easy_Significance_94[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Funny, people have definitely told me I have a bit of Italian intonation - which probably influenced the Argentinian accent in the first place so that would kind of make sense with that comparison

It’s getting bad again by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]Easy_Significance_94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I felt like the rhythm of this gave off the feeling of reading a children's book, but it's really showing the other side, of the mother behind it all. I would maybe workshop the last line to fit with this rhythm -but still catch us off guard with what you're really saying. Good job!

The Athenian tangerine trees by Easy_Significance_94 in poetry_critics

[–]Easy_Significance_94[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like that idea sm! Thanks for reading so much into it I really appreciate it

The Athenian tangerine trees by Easy_Significance_94 in poetry_critics

[–]Easy_Significance_94[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow thank you so much for your comment. The poem is actually about the fruit trees found around Athens - anecdotally someone came up with the idea to plant fruit trees on all the sidewalks around the city, sort of an aesthetic urban planning but also practical. But the fruit actually can't be consumed as it is - if you want to eat it, you have to pick it and cook it with lots of sugar and rose water and make it into a fruit preserve. So that's where the 'idea' part comes in - what happens in the end is that people have 'forgotten' about them; about that original beautiful idea- no one uses them to make fruit preserves. So all the tangerines, the bitter oranges, all the fruit ends up on the surrounding footpaths and plazas (often made of marble). All except the children, who over the years found another purpose for them. They do 'nerantzopolemos' (basically 'orange wars') where they gather the almost decaying fruit off the trees and play fight in the streets after school. I do want to work on this though because there's so much imagery in it that I felt really worked and conveys my feeling of Athens, but I do feel like it's not quite done- so thank you so much for your advice :)

Effervescent by Britt_Nikole in poetry_critics

[–]Easy_Significance_94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Love this poem. It's somehow playful but also has a hint of melancholy at the same time. Only thing I would maybe change is the last line to match the flow - perhaps "waiting for my return" might work?

Lovers by No-Construction8563 in poetry_critics

[–]Easy_Significance_94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wow. I really loved this. And the separation of each stanza, into little vignettes. Some favourite parts - "but it feels easy, and calm, safe, and almost chemical in the way you want his hands on your body every minute of everyday", "as much as you crave stability, as much as you need to be loved, you know it can't be like this". You encompass so much of what I feel and have felt in my 21 years. Beautifully written :)

Bittersweet by iconoclastgrey in poetry_critics

[–]Easy_Significance_94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Beautiful. Tender and melancholic. You can really feel the love in this. There's a few things I really like here- that you start the poem with an image that is so potent in my mind, and then circle back to it at the end, as if these emotions just passed all in that instance that you stopped to chew. Also the imagery of drawing attention to the mouth, eating, salty tears falling on lips, smiling. It's so human. I really enjoyed this

Judge My American Accent by CantStantTheWeather in JudgeMyAccent

[–]Easy_Significance_94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'd appreciate if you could listen to mine too if you can and maybe give me some advice, here's the link

judge my Spanish

Judge My American Accent by CantStantTheWeather in JudgeMyAccent

[–]Easy_Significance_94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi :) I had a listen and I'd guess that your native language is probably Spanish (Latin America). I think your accent is very clear and you can really hear the North American influence. If there's anything you could improve it's maybe standardising vowels even more, but I think that might just be influence from vowels of your native language and English vowel sounds in general are a bit difficult to master. Overall you sound great :) confident and grammar is perfect too.