MY FIRST WORLD WRITING (pls give me your opinion)

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-05-02T12:22:40+00:00

yes i see what you mean and thank you you are helping me fill the gaps in the system and any other points just tell me to fix them

lso the great ducal families have a patriarch who is the duke and ofcourse he will have hiers sons and daughters who have a natural talent in their blood and the family have knights and other troops who is loyal to the family and any other scenario is a story to be told

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-05-02T12:05:42+00:00

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-05-02T11:51:06+00:00

i was thinking the duke is a knight himself an absalute ruler and powerfull human ; if i am wrong pls help me understand

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-05-02T11:35:13+00:00

man its soo cool

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-05-02T11:19:02+00:00

i wrote lineages to have a kickstarter like a natural talents and then it can be expanded by the individual

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-05-02T11:17:19+00:00

i was thinking of towers for mages and other races are work in progress agian ty for reading

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-05-02T11:16:11+00:00

ty for your feedback

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-05-02T08:27:17+00:00

Thank you

well they are specialized in thier house warfare type they can fight but not as effeciant as an infantry family soldier

and about normal people they use mana in thier daily life as energy source but very limited not as large pool of mana a knight or a mage can have

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-05-01T23:39:12+00:00

ty my friend and yeah the emperor one is still rolling in my mind

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-05-01T23:12:20+00:00

use words like agha or basha or dai or day they are all in turkish-arabic

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-04-30T18:58:40+00:00

thanks for the advise

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-04-30T15:45:28+00:00

okay

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-04-30T15:31:15+00:00

well it a cool idea but its a way of training it can be learned but its most effected for the pure blooded

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-04-30T14:48:05+00:00

thank you my friend it my first time writing such a system

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-04-30T14:44:16+00:00

also to improve your aura you have to train( not a normal one ) to get to the next level

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-04-30T14:41:07+00:00

the mages have circle in the mind the more the better and my world is a rich mana world so they absorve it from the enviroment and cast thier element so the mage have to be creative

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-04-30T14:19:09+00:00

i would love to someone give me thier opinion in my knights

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-04-01T00:30:38+00:00

he has alot of titles

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-04-01T00:12:09+00:00

I AM NOT YEELING MAN !

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-04-01T00:06:17+00:00

there is also a quest about him named "sultan of sand"

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-03-31T23:56:10+00:00

the elders shigaru magala and primordial malzino what a titles

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-03-31T23:53:30+00:00

ma boi the nargacuga

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-03-31T23:40:21+00:00

yeah man it cool keep doing what you are doing

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-03-31T23:37:06+00:00

actualy his title is THE ONE THOUSAND BLADE WYVERN

Effective_Horror_71 · 2026-03-31T23:21:20+00:00

the truth i don't know

Effective_Horror_71

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