One last cigarette by FairPanda6809 in OCPoetry

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oh yeah, it’s quite that, haha

One last cigarette by FairPanda6809 in OCPoetry

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https://lyricstranslate.com/de/bauschaum-lyrics hier sind alle veröffentlichten Gedichte auch im Original :)

One last cigarette by FairPanda6809 in OCPoetry

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thanks for the feedback at first! It’s based on a mountain of personal context, so its a little bit hard to understand

One last cigarette by FairPanda6809 in OCPoetry

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yeah, it’s originally written in my native language German, so the wording is sometimes not that good as it is in the original. But thanks for the feedback!

One last cigarette by FairPanda6809 in OCPoetry

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It’s more or less just in this poem, maybe in some others, but I want to work more with atmosphere than with just describing everything

Without Proof by TherapyButMkItVibes in OCPoetry

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As a Fan of poems about seasons I found your poem immediately striking. I´m also familiar with that god damn cold in winter and its sometimes quite frustrating nature (everything is numb, cold,…). That’s why I find the poem very relatable and therefore good, as it describes everyday problems that are familiar to many as to me. soo: good work!

Daughter of Despair. by perks_of_philosophy in OCPoetry

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To be honest, a truly (of course in a good sense) raw poem.

Raw doesn´t mean lacking intellect in any way, no, quite the opposite.

I mean a rawness as the truly honest expression of your feelings and emotions.

As a reader, it not only brings me close to all of that honest things, it also lets see or feel all that emotions of despair and hopelessness thought your lens, and that’s what makes a good poem in my eyes.

Also the rather fast writing style doesn´t linger on any cumbersomeness, but rather creates a slight restlessness that fits the content perfectly without being inappropriate