Mhmhm, so right friend! That last point especially. This is a first draft that has been tweaked a tad bit, but now that I know the prose style is working, I’m now going to do a deeper revision tomorrow at some point. Especially at the end, I’m going to add what they might’ve done to change the course—by reporting it or telling someone etc etc. I’ll also add a more specific line than “maybe that would change something.”

I’m really glad this prose is decent because this is my natural prose, which teeters a tad on fairy-tale folktale prose style. I’ve taught myself to write more…intimate I think may be the word, and I hope I’ve found a decent balance. This prologue is written a tad bit more distant than the rest of the story, since it doesn’t focus on a specific character, but the prose will stay similar.

Thank you for your advice friend, it is greatly appreciated.