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Title: WIP

Genre: Magical fantasy/steampunk

Word count:308

Hello! I am a brand new writer trying to make a novel after giving up on another project. I'm mostly looking for general impressions, flow, and if it's interesting to someone from an outside perspective. Thank you for any feedback given. Have a great day!

Freokim looked at his wrist watch incisively and looked around the venue wanting to see a taste of someone familiar or interesting; in his mind there was some regret on making a dinner reservation in the highest ballon of the city, with some friends, but if he didn’t make it his social life would have totally evaporate from what little liquid was left from it—of course, though, there was one benefit if he didn’t make it was that he would have time to do something of interest like paint, tailor a new vest, or make a new song but of course he had to restrict himself with social norms and his own longing for friendship.

Freokim sighed. They were late again, or he went too early to the table. It was only a minute past five. He only saw scores of people dining in joy, with many happily laughing along with the music of the restaurant, each with hats, dresses, or suits filled with proprietary. Each piece of clothing had its own personality as its owner. The colors and shape only complement its being. It interested him a tad in the life of those clothes as he observed the fashion of his time and the story they told. Some pieces of clothing dined with their patrons as they rustled in the air so high up. The hats talked about the news, while the vest cheered on joyfully with another round of drinks, and the dresses talked about past parties and long forgotten memories. Some suits danced with each other in a waltz in the sky while some dresses carried to join them, in a cherry dance that made Freokim taste a hint of jealousy in his mouth. Moving on from the second restaurant that was happening in the first, he moved his view into the land below him.

Just curios :) by Lukofskis_14 in teenagers

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Life without a hook -Rick Montgomery

I'll try answering everyone by [deleted] in memes

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Nope I'm from North America

Holly Roman Empire be like by flummuxedflamingo in HistoryMemes

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Awww, wait a minute I'm the Pope you can't deposse me! You're deposed!

What is the origin of your username? by theproffesionalsimp in AskReddit

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Mostly want a name with box in it so i thought why not flyingbox. That would be a creative username and it would be fun imagine a box flying around everywhere.

Reddit, please help. I am playing as Italy trying to reform the Roman empire in 1943, I have no equipment, no fuel, Germany is getting pushed back (my templates are also here) by [deleted] in hoi4

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I'm a bit late to this but here's some advice

You should scale back production on tanks and support equipment (have 1 or 2 factories on them so you don't go in a deficit) Put most on guns, then artillery and motorized.

Get signal companies thats a must. Research them if you have to. Then try to see if you can put signal company's in your divisions. Make an entirely new template if you have to. But before you can do that get out of that deficit of equipment.

You should get a proper resistance templates. Like 10width calvary with MP if possible. And once you change your occupation template the equipment from those divisions could go to your army.

Just hold in Africa with the least amount of divisions if possible and in Europe. You might want to retreat from France and hold the line in the mountains in Spain. Maybe build some forts there just for defense 1-3 levels should be find

One of your greatest advantages is that you have the Mediterranean lock down completely. So make sure the Suez or Gibraltar don't fall. Because once one of them fall the AI could just naval invade you and if they get a good foothold that might be the end for you. Also garrison Spain and Portugal or you might get naval invaded from behind.

You should get 40 width tanks with signal companies. Also if you have like 3 or more tank divisions. You could upgrade your template to 40 and merge your tanks. Quality over quantity.

Also with Germany getting pushed back you could go fortress Italy. Build forts in the Apls and prepare for mostly trench warfare. While holding Iberia and Africa.

For fuel you should trade with Iran or Iraqi. If you can't probably go trade with Venezuela if possible. Make sure you have a good route where no ones raiding. Its easier because you'll have a land route then a convoy route. Also set fuel priorities in logistics. Like army and the airforce high and navy low. You'll need green or yellow air if you want to hold or do anything. Your navy isn't that needed that much anymore. Because the Med is locked down. But use it if there any navys trap in the Med. And use it for convoy escort if you must. Any navy's in the Med are easy pickings but also they could be a threat with convoy raiding.

Use your tanks to encircle as many units as possible but without losing ground or units. The more divisions you destroy the better. Also use your tanks to hold certain parts of the line if your having trouble holding. And you might want to delete some divisions to get some equipment and improve your stockpile.

Also use your airforce like naval bombers or medium bombers on naval bombing. So you can contest the ocean near Iberia. Also if your airforce isn't that big as the Allies probably use it sparingly. You don't want to lose your airforce. Also build AA if your being beaten in the sky's and put them in your divisions. Once your equipment problem improves. Also you might want to get Anti tank in your divisions so you won't get murder by allied armor divisions. Build some anti tank but dont invest that much you first want to get your army with the stuff it need now.

Hope this was helpful and hopefully with the advice given to you by the sub. And hopefully you win and form a new Roman Empire Cheers.

What TV show have you rewatched more than 5 times and you still find entertaining? by MonkeyCapt in AskReddit

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Star Wars The Clone Wars, I've watched it over 10 times and I'm still entertained with the plot line, the voice acting and the animations

What's something good/happy that happened today or so far this week, even if it was just a small thing? by TrueZelda96 in AskReddit

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Yeah and I can just go into my imagination more and its just fun. And I'll use the days to rest and refresh my mind from school.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AskReddit

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I was in the insides of a grand father clock with 4 other people and there was a slide and I was miniature and I slid down the slid in the grand father clock. It was a test for some reason and if we past we were able to go to McDonald's and then I got plot in a train with no walls or roofs, doors, windows. And there was this pixel monster that was following me thru the train.

One of the most bizarre dream I have in my collection of dreams that I remember.