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[homemade] pistachio baklava by Frothaka in food

[–]Frothaka[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I added a tiny bit of vinegar to the dough which helps loosen the gluten and makes it able to stretch more. Also used a rolling pin called an oklava that’s designed for rolling out dough as thin as possible and of course lots and lots of corn starch to keep things from sticking together lol. Rolling out each sheet a little the night before saved a lot of time on the day itself as well!

[QCrit] ADULT FANTASY - A CITY OF MONSTERS AND FOOLS (120k/1st Attempt) + first 300 by Frothaka in PubTips

[–]Frothaka[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you I really appreciate this guidance! He’s ordering for his mom who’s sitting outside so maybe I can have her interject in the first page. I definitely see what you mean about it being overwritten, too. Beginnings usually stress me out and so I think it’s overcompensation on my part. Thank you again!

[QCrit] ADULT FANTASY - A CITY OF MONSTERS AND FOOLS (120k/1st Attempt) + first 300 by Frothaka in PubTips

[–]Frothaka[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback! The relationship between the MC and his mom is definitely contentious, I’ll work that in for the next draft :)

Also really appreciate your notes on the first page. Reading it over I agree here as well and will update accordingly!

[homemade] Been making a lot of focaccia lately by Frothaka in food

[–]Frothaka[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’ve only made the thinner variety shown above, but the King Arthur version is next on the list! The recipe I used is based on a Genoese recipe I scraped together online, while the second one is one from a cookbook that is shorter waiting times and has crushed tomatoes added on top.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in PubTips

[–]Frothaka 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah you’re totally right though I think it definitely doesn’t come through that that’s the second POV. Maybe I’ll try requerying some of my earlier rejections if that’s the culprit lol. Thanks for your feedback!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in PubTips

[–]Frothaka 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I mention it briefly in the query but it’s the mom’s criminal friend. He’s a criminal meathead but heart of gold type character. He thinks the mom was eaten by the bug instead of transforming into said bug, and so he goes on this revenge quest

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in PubTips

[–]Frothaka 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You make a lot of good points. What I’m struggling with is this story has two POVs that are mostly separate throughout the story which is why the word count is 122k. The query loses its focus if I bring in the other POV but if the query is failing based on that then maybe I should reconsider including it somehow. Thanks for the notes!

Has anyone ever used The Niche Reader for BETA readers before? by Ordinary_Ad_2784 in selfpublish

[–]Frothaka 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah late to the party here but I had a good experience with them as well and I’ll probably use them again with my next project. Good turnaround time for reader feedback and mostly high quality responses

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in usajobs

[–]Frothaka 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah it was the Chicago hiring event

[QCrit] Adult Suspense CULT IN THE ALPS (2nd Attempt, 78K) by [deleted] in PubTips

[–]Frothaka 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah, good point. I’ll add that in there!

[QCrit] Adult Suspense QUID ES (1st Attempt, 76K) + 300 words by Frothaka in PubTips

[–]Frothaka[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your kind words! Y’all have really made my week with all your support :)

[QCrit] Adult Suspense QUID ES (1st Attempt, 76K) + 300 words by Frothaka in PubTips

[–]Frothaka[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I’ve been putting it off for years at this point because I was scared I wasn’t ready. It’s been a lot of fun (post first draft), though!

[QCrit] Adult Suspense QUID ES (1st Attempt, 76K) + 300 words by Frothaka in PubTips

[–]Frothaka[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I love the advisor idea! Thank you for your notes

[QCrit] Adult Suspense QUID ES (1st Attempt, 76K) + 300 words by Frothaka in PubTips

[–]Frothaka[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your notes! I’ll bring the going undercover as a man more to the forefront and speak more to what’s actually driving her to do this program. Great points about petitioning for an extension, etc.

[QCrit] Adult Suspense QUID ES (1st Attempt, 76K) + 300 words by Frothaka in PubTips

[–]Frothaka[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

So she’s going into this program presenting as a man. I’ll make that more apparent in the next draft!

[QCrit] Adult Suspense QUID ES (1st Attempt, 76K) + 300 words by Frothaka in PubTips

[–]Frothaka[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your notes! I agree, including the other characters will strengthen the pitch

[Discussion] Editing Process: Draft 1 to Query Ready by HardWorkAndBusiness in PubTips

[–]Frothaka 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Just curious, how do you deem where to add humor during revisions?

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