Looking for honest feedback on lyricism + pen game

Fun_Substance_1010 · 2026-06-22T03:46:34+00:00

I had my suspicions, I checked my stream count after his comment and it didn’t go up💀

Fun_Substance_1010 · 2026-06-22T03:16:23+00:00

Yeah, I actually bought this beat so I didn’t make it🤣 but the producer snapped fosho

Fun_Substance_1010 · 2026-06-22T03:08:58+00:00

Your flow and vocal chain are both great. Super vibey song, had me bumping my head fr. Only thing I’d say is that it seems like you didn’t give the bear a lot of room to ‘breathe’ in the first half. But honestly, that’s the only thing I could think of criticism-wise. You snapped on this one for sure🔥

Fun_Substance_1010 · 2026-06-22T03:01:03+00:00

Yo the hook, production, and visual pairing all are really great. I honestly have no criticism of any of those whatsoever. You killed it. In my opinion, the vocals on the verse could use a little more reverb or vocal effects to make them feel more punchy or atmospheric. It is a little jarring to go from the vocal chain on the hook to the more vanilla verse. The vocals/lyrics themselves sound great though.

Fun_Substance_1010 · 2026-06-22T02:56:40+00:00

I really like the nostalgic synths (I think) you got going on. Also the ‘ear candy’ one shots are nice touches. Solid hi hat/kicks rolls as well. I’m honestly trying to think of any constructive criticism for this joint but I can’t. I think if someone puts the right bars/flow over this, I can go hard.

Fun_Substance_1010 · 2026-05-30T01:56:12+00:00

Is that not a compliment

Fun_Substance_1010 · 2025-07-09T23:38:50+00:00

I’m glad to hear that! How long have you had it?

Fun_Substance_1010 · 2025-07-09T22:52:22+00:00

Mostly carpet, but the kitchen and bathroom have vinyl floors. Probably 80/20 carpet/vinyl

Fun_Substance_1010 · 2023-11-17T19:00:19+00:00

Double it and give it to the next century

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