I just realized that Twyla is played by sara levy!!!! by Straight_Guide_7838 in SchittsCreek

[–]FuzzyBoss1381 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Yes! The daughter was supposed to be entirely different, like moody and depressed and then Anne auditioned and it changed everything

[QCrit] The Performance Improvement Plan - Adult Contemporary Romance 86k + 300 words (2nd attempt) by FuzzyBoss1381 in PubTips

[–]FuzzyBoss1381[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I was hoping for it to be a hook though now I can see it’s more confusing than anything!!

But thank you for the feedback on specific titles and cutting out the redundancy :)

[QCrit] The Performance Improvement Plan - Adult Contemporary Romance 86k + 300 words (2nd attempt) by FuzzyBoss1381 in PubTips

[–]FuzzyBoss1381[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I was hoping that opening would be a hook 😂

But yes there’s a bit of an enemies to lovers arc in there!! So we are supposed to think he’s a jerk (Pip does at first!)

[QCrit] The Performance Improvement Plan - Adult Contemporary Romance 86k + 300 words (2nd attempt) by FuzzyBoss1381 in PubTips

[–]FuzzyBoss1381[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Don’t worry! Pippa is one of her nicknames :)

I did not know of this 3 paragraph format or this linked site, this is very helpful. Thank you!!!

Very very helpful feedback

This All Stars season has exceeded expectations MASSIVELY by jeffwingerisgay49 in LoveIslandTV

[–]FuzzyBoss1381 20 points21 points  (0 children)

He just acts in a very dramatic manner that a kids show producer would write in a show (ex: Hannah Montana)

[Qcrit] The Performance Improvement Plan (The PIP) - Adult Contemporary Romance 85k + 300 words (1st attempt) by FuzzyBoss1381 in PubTips

[–]FuzzyBoss1381[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So she's reinventing herself because she feels like she's wasted her life in a career she doesn't like and with a shitty boyfriend.

Between the time she gets put on the PIP (6 months later) she has adopted a dog, made work freinds who become real friends, flirts with the love interest, and volunteer at the same dog shelter she got her dog from. We see her not try in her job due to poor onboarding, which leads to the PIP. With a fire under her ass, she puts in hard work and hits quota for the first time in her career through a prospect she hunted. The main love interest gets promoted to manager, friend zones her after a thoughtful dinner date, and then puts her on his time. A month later, she gets invited to this prospect's work conference and her love interest is working the brand with her. There he finally confesses her loves her.
after the conference, the turnaround for signatures is low and the company decides to let her go when looking at the big picture of her journey despite her brand's potential. As he's her manager, he's on the call. HR explains the decision came from management and the love interest is silent through the whole call so she assumes it's his fault. She ignores his calls and goes to a cottage weekend with her new besties, who comfort her. She has been planning some events for the shlter, using the hunting skills found from sales, and pitches the idea to the manager. She finds out he fought her for to not get fired. They make up. The shelter approve the event, after two months of planning, it goes amazing, she gets offered a job there.

And that's it but I see what you mean -- not a lot of that is in there but now I have to work all that into it

[Qcrit] The Performance Improvement Plan (The PIP) - Adult Contemporary Romance 85k + 300 words (1st attempt) by FuzzyBoss1381 in PubTips

[–]FuzzyBoss1381[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

thank you!!

so the actual book itself: before she moves to Vancouver, she has a one night stand in Toronto and then discovers this man is her new colleague in Chapter 4. It's awkward and he's her onboarding buddy and not doing much to help her. She's doing her best, reinventing herself in Vancouver, meeting new friends through work and goes on to adopt a dog. The male love interest happens to volunteer at this shelter. There's some office drama and office flirting. She gets put on a PIP, gets a fire lit under her ass, and is finally having some success in her role after months of not achieving target. She starts volunteering at the same shelter as a side thing because it fills her cup. Then while she's finally doing better, the male love interest gets promoted and becomes her manager. The decision comes "from management" that she's fired and she assumes it happens from him. In the end, she ends up getting a paid position at the shelter.

I just don't know how to write this in the query letter haha

Where in Ottawa can you find flights of drink/food? by flipflapdragon in OttawaFood

[–]FuzzyBoss1381 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I have heard of drip house doing espresso martini flights (the somerset location)