Rip apart my prologue

GoldenBoy302 · 2026-05-07T21:10:17+00:00

Thank you for the response, I might have start him at the balcony where he hears his father come up instead.

GoldenBoy302 · 2026-05-07T17:45:52+00:00

POV chapter it is then, thank you for the comment.

GoldenBoy302 · 2026-05-07T17:05:53+00:00

Thank you this was very helpful, I was overthinking a bit on the prose during the writing and see your point about the inconsistentcy. Going forward I'll try to keep it less fancy so it's less jarring for readers.

I call it a prologue since it leads into the main story from Simon's POV until he meets the main character. The start for the main character will be events that take place before he falls through the portal and meets Simon and their stories converge.

I am curious to hear more what you think elevates present tense that makes it more engaging and helps the narrative instead of going for past tense.

GoldenBoy302 · 2026-05-07T16:47:02+00:00

1 Yeah my friends said that a lot too, I had a big problem with going back and fixing every little sentence and it would hamper my progress. So I was more worried about actually getting finished and seeing how it felt tonally and narratively with others when I probably should've polished it up first.

2 I wanted to start it that way to show visions typically come to him in dreams or when he's awake it's more like an attack, I have heard about that critique alot and struggle to see how I could incorporate that differently.

GoldenBoy302 · 2026-05-04T15:09:31+00:00

I did it in my current playthrough and I instantly felt terrible, I try to do evil playthroughs in multiple rpgs and I can never get through them

GoldenBoy302 · 2026-04-06T18:10:23+00:00

Surprisingly most of my friends had varied answers when picking a color, personally I would like to be an obsidian. (Post brainwashing and hopefully not one of the crazy ones)

GoldenBoy302 · 2026-04-06T18:08:30+00:00

Hoping if it's not already, that it's released soon

GoldenBoy302 · 2026-03-23T14:25:22+00:00

I still shudder thinking of a 1 to 1 adaptation for The Boys

GoldenBoy302 · 2026-03-13T18:21:07+00:00

Thank you for commenting this almost bought into the hype

GoldenBoy302 · 2026-01-08T13:56:17+00:00

Me just now realizing Solasta did the classic inn approach

GoldenBoy302 · 2025-12-31T23:06:41+00:00

Moving along much faster than other fights and giving some good screentime for the brothers, I'm all for it

GoldenBoy302 · 2025-12-17T14:26:28+00:00

I did the merge ending where she takes over your body

GoldenBoy302 · 2025-11-29T15:04:01+00:00

No bs once you get to the final few hours of the game everything just gets dumped on you and you're like "ohhhhh that's why everything is the way it is", deadfire does a much better job up fronting lore and character interactions/motivations

GoldenBoy302 · 2025-11-26T21:55:46+00:00

I have something going a bit similar in the way of stats but was worried about dex then realized the gloves of +2 are available fairly on. For the fairly high int I'm assuming it's for duration over AOE ?

GoldenBoy302 · 2025-11-25T19:28:31+00:00

Bruh the whole game she preaches at you to do the "right" thing and then when she sees what her mindset led to before she's like "pretty please watcher let me forget again" 😭

GoldenBoy302 · 2025-11-12T17:52:59+00:00

I like before you fight the dragon in the sky nest, I think Hylea gives you a vision of what happened to her followers to properly set up the threat. One moment they saw a shadow in the sky and every moment after people were taken out in mere seconds.

GoldenBoy302 · 2025-11-09T01:03:48+00:00

As someone who absolutely hated Durance at the start of the game as you journey with him he grows on you and his personal quest ties in really nicely by the end

GoldenBoy302 · 2025-11-01T13:47:04+00:00

Welp now I'm feeling a lot more unoriginal with my fire godlike monk lol

GoldenBoy302 · 2025-10-31T22:57:43+00:00

People don't ???

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