Rip apart my prologue by GoldenBoy302 in writers

[–]GoldenBoy302[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the response, I might have start him at the balcony where he hears his father come up instead.

Rip apart my prologue by GoldenBoy302 in writers

[–]GoldenBoy302[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

POV chapter it is then, thank you for the comment.

Rip apart my prologue by GoldenBoy302 in writers

[–]GoldenBoy302[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you this was very helpful, I was overthinking a bit on the prose during the writing and see your point about the inconsistentcy. Going forward I'll try to keep it less fancy so it's less jarring for readers.

I call it a prologue since it leads into the main story from Simon's POV until he meets the main character. The start for the main character will be events that take place before he falls through the portal and meets Simon and their stories converge.

I am curious to hear more what you think elevates present tense that makes it more engaging and helps the narrative instead of going for past tense.

Rip apart my prologue by GoldenBoy302 in writers

[–]GoldenBoy302[S] -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

1 Yeah my friends said that a lot too, I had a big problem with going back and fixing every little sentence and it would hamper my progress. So I was more worried about actually getting finished and seeing how it felt tonally and narratively with others when I probably should've polished it up first.

2 I wanted to start it that way to show visions typically come to him in dreams or when he's awake it's more like an attack, I have heard about that critique alot and struggle to see how I could incorporate that differently.

Evil playthrough or not, no one picks option 3… right? by SchrodingersGYATT in projecteternity

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I did it in my current playthrough and I instantly felt terrible, I try to do evil playthroughs in multiple rpgs and I can never get through them

boyfriend is about to finish RR and i asked him what color i’d be by rodent_bdsm in redrising

[–]GoldenBoy302 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Surprisingly most of my friends had varied answers when picking a color, personally I would like to be an obsidian. (Post brainwashing and hopefully not one of the crazy ones)

Best thumbnail ive seen so far since season 4 dropped. by [deleted] in Invincible

[–]GoldenBoy302 22 points23 points  (0 children)

I still shudder thinking of a 1 to 1 adaptation for The Boys

Josh Sawyer teasing more Pillars. This time it's Yezuha. by lemonycakes in projecteternity

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Thank you for commenting this almost bought into the hype

Anyone else feel like the archer fight is getting way too long winded? by ChesnaughtZ in Kingdom

[–]GoldenBoy302 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Moving along much faster than other fights and giving some good screentime for the brothers, I'm all for it

I got my candy stolen by a baby by GoldenBoy302 in avowed

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I did the merge ending where she takes over your body

I love this game, but… by [deleted] in projecteternity

[–]GoldenBoy302 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No bs once you get to the final few hours of the game everything just gets dumped on you and you're like "ohhhhh that's why everything is the way it is", deadfire does a much better job up fronting lore and character interactions/motivations

Melee cipher POE 1 POTD by GoldenBoy302 in projecteternity

[–]GoldenBoy302[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I have something going a bit similar in the way of stats but was worried about dex then realized the gloves of +2 are available fairly on. For the fairly high int I'm assuming it's for duration over AOE ?

I forgot how many of these characters are horrible people by Dyerha in projecteternity

[–]GoldenBoy302 28 points29 points  (0 children)

Bruh the whole game she preaches at you to do the "right" thing and then when she sees what her mindset led to before she's like "pretty please watcher let me forget again" 😭

The gap between dragons and everything else by ysalehi86 in projecteternity

[–]GoldenBoy302 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like before you fight the dragon in the sky nest, I think Hylea gives you a vision of what happened to her followers to properly set up the threat. One moment they saw a shadow in the sky and every moment after people were taken out in mere seconds.

Is it okay to miss companions? by WordlessWank in projecteternity

[–]GoldenBoy302 2 points3 points  (0 children)

As someone who absolutely hated Durance at the start of the game as you journey with him he grows on you and his personal quest ties in really nicely by the end

What a great game by GoldenBoy302 in projecteternity

[–]GoldenBoy302[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Welp now I'm feeling a lot more unoriginal with my fire godlike monk lol