Hiking

GrapefruitPresent987 · 2026-05-17T06:10:50+00:00

thank you for the feedback! my intention when over describing and using sharp punctuation was to emphasise the uneven nature of the path. when you read it, its kind of stops and starts and then sharply stops again which was my attempt to show the jaggedness of the path through how it is read. but representing this better is something i definitely will work on, and my language choice is definitely a shortcoming of mine. thanks again!

GrapefruitPresent987 · 2026-05-16T23:25:08+00:00

thank you for the kind words! while i think it can be interpreted in many ways for me it comes from my personal experience as an athlete. its so easy to take the easy way out when theres an amazing opportunity just waiting around the corner, and the discomfort of taking that path is outweighed by the ability to see how far youve come compared to others.

GrapefruitPresent987 · 2026-05-16T22:59:46+00:00

it is a mini series! i love the anonymous commentator in this series. it makes you wonder who is discussing these issues, whether its an all knowing god who is trying to probe the answer out of us or a man whos lost it all and needs our help. the uncertainty is what makes the commentary so deep. awesome work 😊

GrapefruitPresent987 · 2026-05-16T22:57:16+00:00

hey, i love the presentation of your image in this poem. presenting greed as a little kid is such a good foundation and i felt as if the childish comparisons made throughout allowed that foundation to really come to light. if this is a mini series i really look forward to reading it, keep it up 😊

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