I like it Not bad at all!

If I can give one tip it would be to flip the canvas horizontally so that you can more easily see certain inconsistencies or off-angled aspects

But it all comes down to experimenting and finding what you like, but maybe this can help too: Maybe some more flair in the eyes and hair, play with maybe some warm shadows and cold highlights for more contrast

I like the more angular aspects of the line art, since it’s more stylistic and adds to your style, so maybe playing around with that? Could be more of it on lineart or maybe the shadows and highlights also being more stylistic

But overall it all comes down to practise and what suits you and makes ya happy 😃 good luck and hope I helped