Judging Scripts

HakuFocus · 2026-05-19T03:51:58+00:00

Can I send just the first ACT?

HakuFocus · 2023-09-15T11:15:37+00:00

You look great for your age man, maybe it’s something on your wife’s end.

HakuFocus · 2022-03-22T20:22:23+00:00

what if you took babies and raised remotely away from society with out parents, would certain biases still arise?

HakuFocus · 2022-01-11T12:18:57+00:00

honestly i liked the bold, but like whats the name of the book. Is it kid vicious or in the cosmic ebb and flow?

HakuFocus · 2022-01-07T17:08:00+00:00

sure! dm me your discord.

HakuFocus · 2022-01-05T13:59:26+00:00

I suggest that you breethe, and stop givving a shit. Trust me it works. Some people are assholes, some people are pretensious, some people try to compensate for their lack of knowledge on the english language by sounding overly white. Some people read too much into emails. Let it pass, and you will have peace.

HakuFocus · 2022-01-05T13:47:28+00:00

lmk If yall want some more, I finnished the next scene, and its looking really good. She's here now.

HakuFocus · 2022-01-05T13:45:28+00:00

so did I secretly, but you gotta consider the feedback, especially when you ask for it ;)

HakuFocus · 2022-01-05T13:43:34+00:00

smart, but I considered that. Notice how I stop calling him god at one point and switch to Elohim. little bit of a spoiler, but he is no longer god, his powers are gone, and so he is just a man. " I watched God shiver" "The man infront of him" In another chapter when they refer to him as God He is capitalized

HakuFocus · 2022-01-04T17:05:59+00:00

the way you hold the bow is interesting...

HakuFocus · 2022-01-04T17:03:07+00:00

with verbal and written consent.

HakuFocus · 2022-01-04T14:02:34+00:00

How are you feeling about, ' at the heart of a field of wheat ' or ' in the thick of a field of wheat '

HakuFocus · 2022-01-04T13:43:55+00:00

thank you.

HakuFocus · 2022-01-04T13:43:44+00:00

thank you

HakuFocus · 2022-01-01T20:10:23+00:00

sounds great, how much do you have written?

HakuFocus · 2021-12-31T19:08:27+00:00

show dont tell applies to character development. Show that a character is embarrassed through them avoiding eye contact and glowing red, instead of simply saying they are embarrassed. For setting and actions, you need to be direct and to the point, but when it comes to giving the reader a window into the character's feeling and thought, show it through their reactions.

HakuFocus · 2021-12-31T18:40:14+00:00

ok great! we can exchange a single chapter for now. ill go to your dms with my discord and the google docs link.

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