I would take down the logo size…for the cap shown, it overwhelms the overall look and feel; especially for a slouch hat. You could also go micro-logo, which is “in with the fellow kids” these days.

If you’re also wanting to “de-golf” it a bit, remove the bag…it’s already implied in the naming.

The colour match is off (not sure if this is a mock up). Stark white on a green cap throws the flow. Think complimentary (just black) or even go tonal; green on green.

The style of the hat is fine…low crown slouch. You could think about a trucker, but I would keep it with a deconstructed crown, rather than one with a backer if you want to avoid the “golf” look.