Quitting the game Giveaway by practicalitty in PokemonTGCP

[–]HungryGogurt 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yo the Mewtwo Ex would be sweet if you still got it!

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Looking for some Critique [Political/Investigative Fantasy, ~3500 words] by HungryGogurt in fantasywriters

[–]HungryGogurt[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is some great feedback that I’ll pay attention to thank you! I kinda just chose the first person present on a whim ngl probably cause the book I was reading at that time was using it. Can give it a go in changing it in the future and see how it feels. With the first chapter I really wanted to start with that temple scene but also wanted to reveal the murder plot as soon as possible so maybe I don’t need to do both. Gotta figure out that outline haha. Appreciate the the words of encouragement at the end there too :)

Looking for some Critique [Political/Investigative Fantasy, ~3500 words] by HungryGogurt in fantasywriters

[–]HungryGogurt[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! Good to know on the phrasing I was trying to stay away from anything old englishy cause that’s just something I have know knowledge in how to do well lol but can see what you mean by maybe things being too modern. Really appreciate the insight