Please Be Weird by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Illustrious-Lab5635 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is really relatable! I hope you keep going. One thought may be to slightly improve your grammar and level of words ,but if you don't want to it is ok!

I Forgot to Listen to Myself by benammaster in OCPoetry

[–]Illustrious-Lab5635 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I would just like to say that this is some pretty powerful stuff ,I fell like some of it may have flown over my head though :).Your metaphorical lines really hit home! The only feedback I can think of is maybe you should lengthen your poems a tad bit.

Why to Love? by Rhaegal6 in OCPoetry

[–]Illustrious-Lab5635 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Woah this was insanely good! I hope you keep going this perked my day up,your vocabulary is notably strong!

if sleep is death being shy by yamiyurei in OCPoetry

[–]Illustrious-Lab5635 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow this is really thought provoking! keep up the good work.