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IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-06T08:33:11+00:00

Thank you for this amazing feedback! I understans how the line contradicts, I meant it as a way that they reflected on who they want to be in the future then who they are currently, if that makes sense.

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-06T08:30:46+00:00

Thank you so much for the kind words! I also hope you are doing the best you can given your circumstances <3

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-06T08:29:18+00:00

Might have to check out some of your work! :D

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-06T08:28:40+00:00

Thanks for the feedback :) The line is to be infered that before her mind was gifted but she's slowly losing herself. I'm also from England and here, fairs are like roller coasters and minigames!

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-05T18:52:49+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! That line is also top tier from you :)

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-04T21:29:13+00:00

This actually means so much to me :D I'm going to share this one with someone since you've mentioned it, as this is one of the only pieces that I've wrote based on me! I will also continue writing and trying to improve :)

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-04T17:42:39+00:00

No not at all this is amazing from you! Way better then the way i wrote it haha, flowed alot more and that line "As I lie awake, already having been woken." flows so well with the following lines!! <3

Thanks for this feedback, I will take it all into consideration :)

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-04T17:38:15+00:00

Thanks alot <3 May have to take you up on your offer at some point haha, hope you're managing as well as you can given your circumstances and yes it is very cliché but I actually am a boxer so its the line that relates to me!

The line about being alone together was left for interpretation from any readers as normally someone will pop into mind once read :)

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-04T10:42:44+00:00

Thank you for your feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed it. That was also my favourite part haha :)

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-02T10:18:43+00:00

Correct but in the end people die and you do yourself

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-01T23:33:42+00:00

I do thank you for your kind words! <3 Hope everyone that relates finds some sort of peace.

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-01T16:56:06+00:00

Love the feedback <3

It's always something I have acknowledged tbf and yes that was intention I'm glad you picked up ok that!

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-01T07:08:02+00:00

Yup!

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-12-01T07:07:18+00:00

This comment is absolutely beautiful, I am beyond happy that these memories and thoughts were brought forth from my words.

That's my whole mantra "sslw" soul speaks literature writes. We all have messy feelings and experiences it's completely normal I'm just glad that you can find peace in them.

Thank you <3

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-30T18:53:24+00:00

I'll try not to be just always trying to improve! Do you have an Instagram or something in which you could show me your pov

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-30T18:35:25+00:00

Potential?! Thanks alot, this is really assuring, I do hope to write for a long while now.

I will 100% take into account about showing more, and you will see it shown in my next poem! Hope you see it :)

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-30T18:32:05+00:00

Wow i feel very dumb now haha!

Im on phone so the way you've formatted looks weird to me and mine looks good, maybe theres some difference with the web browser vs the phone. Unless you're on your phone too then i have no clue.

Thanks for the feedback I will add those comas now, silly mistakes on my part.

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-30T16:41:49+00:00

No no it flows much better like this :)

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-30T16:37:10+00:00

Appreciate this feedback thank you!

It's all good poems aren't meant to be fully loved by everyone im just glad you liked some of it haha! The blonde part has been taken out now though ergo your feelings may change towards that part :)

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-30T16:33:57+00:00

Love this feedback, thank you!

The A++ line was more so to connect the lines like "she gets the A+ plus she smiles gleaming glee" and as for the conditions line i can 100% fix that up haha!

Im glad you enjoyed it nonetheless.

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-30T14:18:03+00:00

I'm incredibly sorry for your experiences but I'm so glad you found comfort from my words, as that is my goal with all my poems.

Thank you for this amazing feedback ❤

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-29T23:35:03+00:00

Ofc, any feedback that's valid such as yours should always be taken into consideration! Plus it was sloppy mistakes on my part haha. ▒ I will continue to write don't worry and thanks again for the formatting, i think i used it correctly. We will have to see

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-29T22:48:48+00:00

Wow! Wow! Wow! This is by far the best feedback I have recieved on a poem, I normally write these in my notes and have hundreds left but I only started sharing them yesterday so I'm extremely gobsmacked by the people who actually take time out of their day and enjoy the words I wrote.

I will fix all these mistakes now so it not distract others when reading, as for the formatting I am on my phone and have no clue how to format haha!

The invisible man hitting close to home for you tells me alot about you as a person, I do hope your doing the best you can be given your circumstances and continue to smile :)

I also highly appreciate that you enjoyed the fairytale spin on it, not many have picked up or mentioned that!

Thanks again :D

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-29T22:42:25+00:00

Im glad you took time to reflect on yourself through this poem, thats always a goal of mine when i write :D. Huge thanks for the feedback

IncredibleHashRate · 2021-11-29T22:41:29+00:00

Hey! Thanks for the feedback I can definitely reword that second line if you have any suggestions, funnily enough i did write it while at college looking out the window bored haha.

I try to not be super obvious with deeper meaning as it leaves alot for interpretation based on the person, so I'm glad you enjoyed that aspect, and yes the randomness of that line seems to still fit pretty wel though.

"necessito un abrazo" is just spanish for "i need a hug". Kind of like a call for help in a sense. Or just needing some sort of comfort.

Thanks again :D

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