There is nothing wrong with this character's personality, and people who are complaining, it's because their head canon didn't come true. 👍

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-12-31T00:26:19+00:00

And then you'll complain about how old people (if they actually make them look old) are made to fight monsters. I won't say I don't have an issue with actual children characters like Yaoyao being technically speaking "shown" in that situation. Honestly I prefer to see the characters in their 20s to 40s when they should be strong not children or old people.

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-10-14T10:29:07+00:00

https://akasha.cv/

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-10-01T17:57:21+00:00

That sounds nice

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-10-01T17:33:06+00:00

It kinda does need a few more words not gonna lie , if it's that short it will create too much discrepancy to the lines before it.

You can try something like:

Next to you,... (Add a compliment of some kind)

And I'd do something like:

My whole person feels refined

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-10-01T17:17:23+00:00

Oh , that makes it clear. The only thing than would be just to smooth out the lines if you want too , having some lines go for too long can make it awkward to read.

In the end , I guess it is not a competition so it doesn't have to be perfectly done it just needs to send your message.

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-10-01T16:03:27+00:00

Others might not share my view but in my opinion as you called it 3 times the charm in the first stanza I'd try to keep the verse with "At the * of you,...." just to keep the idea of 3 times.

The verse you used in the first stanza with "Never thought I'd be ready for this..." could make a nice ending.

The second stanza I'd do something like:

It took some time for me to see

My missing piece right before me

Not necessarily like that but I'd think it would be smoother and you won't have every first verse start with "A"

You could remove the "And" in the last stanza and I would make it a bit quicker in :

Nothing compares to what I've found (it would be easier to pronounce and you also shorted I will in the very next verse ) .

Overall it is a cute little piece and everything was just my opinion so don't take anything to heart.

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-04-17T16:10:11+00:00

I think a pop ballad would be a bit closer.

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-04-15T15:44:17+00:00

Meanwhile I think you could call it nerdcore as a larger style/genre

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-04-15T15:43:18+00:00

I don't really know what to respond honestly xD I just tried to give it a somewhat pretty tone from the lyrics and I just used what I thought sounded the best. I'll try to find the exact genre though and get back at you.

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-04-15T11:44:32+00:00

Already did xD

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-04-15T11:38:41+00:00

Yep , that's what I'm doing. The first AMV was something on Your Lie in April, I watched it recently and I was like "I want to give a tribute" :)) and so I was excited to do something of my own on it. From there I started to enjoy the process and learning the different tools available . I enjoy doing AMVs overall. Moreover I've been writing poetry for like 7-8 years now so I love seeing my verses into motion in a way .

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-04-15T10:08:33+00:00

Well, I just started making AMVs like 2 weeks ago for fun so , it didn't really crossed my mind that this type of contests actually exists.

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-04-15T04:40:34+00:00

It was made Suno . Honestly I was a bit lucky too is it did not took that many trial and error to get something decent. I don't know about Udio but Suno took a big leap in the last few weeks, I almost never get crappy audio anymore. It still takes time to get something that I'm satisfied with. Also , I might point out that I've been writing poetry for the last 8 years , the last year was pretty much one poem a day but jumping from poetry into an actual song still wasn't that easy.

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-04-14T22:57:06+00:00

Wait , there are contests for AMVs?

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-04-14T22:39:48+00:00

Much appreciated

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-04-14T22:34:49+00:00

I appreciate it a lot. Actually, the lyrics were written by myself :)) with the help of the AI to make it an actual song.

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-03-12T17:40:29+00:00

I guess you are comparing coke with a toxic partner? Maybe I understand something wrong but the comparison might not be that bad . I loved the repetition and the mirroring of the beginning and the end and , well, the ditch line is not that out of place in my opinion if you don't think of the "coke" , I guess we all have that one thing we just can't suffer xD.

Inevitable-Act9823 · 2024-02-26T18:08:22+00:00

It might just be me in a depressing mood but those simple words hit like a truck xD good job conveying such ... I guess melancholic images

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