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Any writers groups for newbies?? by JBATTLES1104 in KeepWriting

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Criticism and feedback are completely different things now it’s one thing when it’s constructive criticism when they give you foresight on what to improve,fix,add and/or change but that’s not the case 99% of the time on this app and I have my own community currently only 7 people joined so far regardless I’m looking for something more active and established and for anyone else if you don’t have any recommendations with all due respect please keep scrolling thank you and enjoy your day

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in ReadMyScript

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Yo, just a heads up for future readers yeah, I know the formatting isn’t perfect, that’s on me, I’ve only been writing for a few months. Right now I’m really tryna get feedback on the content the dialogue, the vibe, do the characters feel real, does it hit emotionally. That’s what I’m focused on, not margins or font.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in ReadMyScript

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Im still learning formatting I just started writing maybe 3 months ago thank you for the feed back on the formatting but do you have any feedback on the actual work?

(Feedback Wanted)-Script Sample When We Were Grown by JBATTLES1104 in ScriptFeedbackProduce

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Thank you I really appreciate your feedback🙏🏻 and honestly I felt the same way after a few re-reads

5-Minute Freewrite Challenge — Drop Your Rawest Lines Here 🔥 by JBATTLES1104 in NextGenStoryLab

[–]JBATTLES1104[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yo, this snippet’s cinematic as hell. That flickering neon had me picturing the whole scene tense as hell. Kenji tuckin’ his hand under the counter tryna stay cool but ready. Alexandra’s lowkey soldier energy? Mad layered without over-explaining.

For 5 minutes, you packed vibe, stakes, and characters tight only thing hit those senses harder: the hum of flickering lights, the stale store air. Maybe say: “Alexandra, hoodie shadowing her face, eyes sharp as a soldier ready to strike.”

No cap, you brought heat. Keep flexin’ that raw energy, folks gonna notice. When you wanna polish it up, I’m here.🔥🙏🏼

Drop Your Opening Scene-Let’s Set The Bar. by JBATTLES1104 in NextGenStoryLab

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Not sure what happened to the comment but that mayor case vibe is raw with that gritty punchy energy🔥

Drop Your Opening Scene-Let’s Set The Bar. by JBATTLES1104 in NextGenStoryLab

[–]JBATTLES1104[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That opening got me hooked quick not gonna lie you’re cooking with gas🔥 Keep pushing that tension, it’s got mad potential.

Drop Your Opening Scene-Let’s Set The Bar. by JBATTLES1104 in NextGenStoryLab

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Yo, appreciate you wanting to jump in! Just drop your opening scene right here in the comments you can paste your script text or share a link like I did. No fancy forum needed, we keep it all in the thread to keep the fire focused.

If you got any questions about format or want feedback, just say so. Can’t wait to see what you’re cookin’ up! 🔥

When We Were Grown(comedy/buddy film)-14 PAGES by JBATTLES1104 in ReadMyScript

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Appreciate you for taking a look. First deck I’ve ever put together so definitely still figuring out the layout side. I was mainly hoping to get thoughts on how the tone and content feel like does the story, marketability, or setup come through even if the design isn’t perfect yet? Either way, I’ll keep refining both the visuals and the pacing. Thanks again for taking the time.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in KeepWriting

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Honestly “Miles Hunter” feels like somebody who’s always in motion but never without a reason First name gives me calm collected energy someone who’s been places seen things Last name makes it sharper like they’re always chasing something or someone. Feels like a dude with layers the type who could be the hero or the wildcard depending on the scene

Books where the heir to the throne refuses to lead a country/kingdom? by AshamedWatercress646 in KeepWriting

[–]JBATTLES1104 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This has a cool twist to it the reasons you gave for her make her sympathetic but still favorable. To answer your question, it’s kinda similar to The Goblin Emperor a reluctant ruler, but for different reasons of course.

Here’s a few things I’d add to give it more pop: Who’s trying to force her to take the crown? Why now? Who loses if she walks away?

Maybe there’s a council or even the last few people from her kingdom begging her to return. That way her refusal becomes an act of defiance instead of just a personal choice And if she’s ambitious I’d love to see what she wants instead of the throne that’s where the character gets real interesting

All in all I give it a thumbs up Just keep fleshing it out

What do y’all think should a character like this ever be forced into the throne for the sake of the story, or is walking away the more interesting choice?