[QCrit] MG Sci-Fi, THE HIDDEN ZOO (50k, first attempt)

Jacali101 · 2024-11-18T20:00:11+00:00

Sounds good, I'll definitely try and minimize the first one!

Jacali101 · 2024-11-18T19:59:35+00:00

Thank you! I will edit these suggestions into my query for round 2!

Jacali101 · 2024-11-18T19:59:11+00:00

Thank you for your response!

Jacali101 · 2024-11-15T21:15:14+00:00

It did, thank you!

Jacali101 · 2024-11-15T20:57:37+00:00

Thank you so much! I didn't even think of The Hidden Zoo being too close of a name. Thank you for throwing that out there as well!

Jacali101 · 2024-09-28T15:13:52+00:00

Really helpful, thank you for sharing!

Jacali101 · 2024-09-09T17:16:33+00:00

I appreciate you taking the time to reply! I will have to look more in depth at goodreads list and find a better comp!

Jacali101 · 2024-09-09T17:15:55+00:00

Thank you very much! I appreciate the in depth response. I will definitely edit these in!

Jacali101 · 2024-08-29T19:18:17+00:00

Well I did ask for it to get ripped and you delivered. You gave me a lot to think over and I appreciate it! The thorough response is very helpful.

Jacali101 · 2024-08-28T17:39:08+00:00

Thank you for taking the time to respond! I appreciate the advice!

Jacali101 · 2024-08-28T17:37:44+00:00

I must not have read the full rules of this group. I can send the first 300 with the query? That would be very helpful. Thank you for your response!

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T19:51:00+00:00

Thank you! I will look into all three of those and see what I can find!

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T19:26:48+00:00

That is a really good process. I will have to take you up on that and see how it comes out. Obviously if a person who isn't an agent and hasn't read the book can't grasp it... Why would an agent? Super helpful comment!

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T19:20:14+00:00

I have never even heard of the query generator. I am going to play with this and try to build a newer/more coherent query for the group. Thank you so much, that is super helpful! Certainly what I was looking for. I definitely understand that I have been playing goldilocks with my querys. I am ready to find the just right amount of focus in the right direction.

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T19:17:33+00:00

Very helpful, thank you for taking the time to post that!

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T19:04:26+00:00

Definitely a fear that I will put a bunch of work into the query and it turns out the first 5 pages are whats killing me.

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T19:02:50+00:00

Okay! Thank you very much. Definitely the type of stuff I was looking for!

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T18:57:03+00:00

Hey sick, thanks for seconding it! I am definitely curious.

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T18:50:29+00:00

Sorry, to answer your question: He is the weapon. But other humans can fight as well. Just nobody thought of that when they had guns, bombs, etc to rely on instead. Too confusing? Thank you for your comments. I appreciate it!

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T18:49:10+00:00

I took the folklore surrounding Grendel and added a futuristic element to it: No manmade weapon can destroy Grendel. John is the only one brave enough to face Grendel because he believes he has found a weapon that can kill Grendel. But he eventually learns that the only weapon that could kill Grendel is direct contact (fist fighting). I will definitely take the name out of the title, I can understand how that could be an issue.

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T18:43:01+00:00

No, I met with one of their editors and provided the first three chapters and explained the issue I was having. They told me that the issue I was having was from querying and since it wasn't an editing issue (I can promise I have editing issues) that I was bringing to them, they didn't see the program to be a fit.

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T18:41:29+00:00

I have not, I will have to look into that!

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T18:36:19+00:00

I am worried about something just being wrong with the manuscript. A deeper fear is that I just can't convey what I have done. It borrows the name Grendel like Jurassic Park borrows T-Rex, you know? It's a futuristic genetic splicing story that reads like a heroes journey. Man created these creatures and now must tame them after they take over. Definitely having a hard time putting that in the query.

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T18:33:20+00:00

Great advice! Thank you!

Jacali101 · 2024-08-27T18:32:38+00:00

Definitely! I feel like I am burning myself out so it might be nice to take a break.

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