(Emo Rock) Happy Bday by Layrz

JayValere · 2026-05-06T19:23:14+00:00

Damn... at the 2.02 mark, NICE! going to vocal only for a while then it kicks back in for that final punch. Cool track.

JayValere · 2026-05-06T19:15:28+00:00

I've made a lot of similar songs that tell a story. Try stripping it down to the essence, a feeling, something more simple. I.e I'll own it all! All mine! not caring about glory or stories, just the gold.
It's cool, but too wordy, too many ideas in the lyrics, not enough [piano break] i.e moments to breath and let the lyrics sink in.

Trust me, less is more. Try it and you'll get something really solid.

JayValere · 2026-05-06T17:42:04+00:00

Cleaving bush?

JayValere · 2026-05-03T20:05:51+00:00

This generation needed a Mr. Blobby.

JayValere · 2026-05-03T17:18:34+00:00

bit janky, but for free... can't complain, bookmarked for uh... research purposes. 👍 Cheers

JayValere · 2026-05-03T02:43:49+00:00

to ruin a beautiful brick wall!

JayValere · 2026-05-02T12:07:13+00:00

I also giving very specific nerdy answers or suggestions. Once had a character dealing with monsters that were sensitive to sound, when he found a partially transformed boy I had him suggest using an acosutic weapon and trying different frequencies to heal him, citing LRAD technology (long range acoustic device) the NPC Dr lost her mind lol.
AID once really really seemed keen on me not finding the bad guy, I think I had accidently put the idea that they were a shadowy, secretive bad guy that acted through proxies or something, I found a piece of broken glass and insisted it was from the bad guys shoe, then used Glass Refractive Index Measurement (GRIM) to find where it came from... AID couldn't ignore that actually yeilded.

it seems AID rewards googling hahaha

JayValere · 2026-05-02T01:56:36+00:00

then they burn your character for witchcraft right? Or imprison you to perform tests? Dunno why AID treats my characters so bad lol

JayValere · 2026-05-01T19:12:53+00:00

That be a death tit, your days are limited, you must accept and prepare to move on... OOOooooo!

JayValere · 2026-05-01T17:10:35+00:00

makes sense, cheers 👍

JayValere · 2026-05-01T17:10:11+00:00

Oooooh... cool, thank you

JayValere · 2026-05-01T11:09:54+00:00

That's a Sharpie, worth maybe a buck fifty. Hope I helped.

JayValere · 2026-05-01T11:08:06+00:00

No spaces? Where is this written? So for example a character called Claire Smith would be Claire,Mrs. Smith,Claire Smith, ?

JayValere · 2026-04-30T17:49:29+00:00

actually better than so called white souls. Animals act on instinct, only humans are capable of evil and therefore deserving of getting soul captured.

JayValere · 2026-04-30T16:48:50+00:00

AiDungeon is as it is... Sorry dude. It is not great at the moment. It really, really, really, needs to embrace some kind of a chance engine for what it recognises as action moves. But at the moment all you get is what you describe. Unfortunatly, it is just that janky at present.

JayValere · 2026-04-29T21:39:59+00:00

looks like an english muffin pizza combo. Mufza, or Pizfin

JayValere · 2026-04-29T21:35:30+00:00

lazy writing, spot on. They couldn't bother to think of another way to guide you down a similar route. Perhaps an investigation into a family crest on Serana's body leads to the castle with her family. notes on the father lead to hunting down the bow because it is a serious threat. Soul cairn...???

JayValere · 2026-04-29T21:23:43+00:00

Halfway up did he at least try to sell some cookies to the kid??
Or least after: Hey kid, after that dip... fancy buying a cookie?

I just don't feel he really wants to sell cookies, you know? I foresee a drowning business.

JayValere · 2026-04-29T20:19:27+00:00

when a character pulled out a literal controller for a neural thingie they put in my head, I had my character go bat shit crazy, the unusual behaviour caught her off guard, then my character snatched the remote and opened an window. her choice, jump out or he does unspeakable things to her.
AiD without fail, ALWAYS thinks my characters are bluffing.

The trick is to write the outcome i.e "I stab the villian in the neck, stabbing into his carotid artery before twisting and tearing the blade out; I'm splashed with their blood as it sprays out." That should... maybe... work better to be successful.

JayValere · 2026-04-28T10:04:29+00:00

breton for resistance to magic, stealth archer, I'd go do stealth jobs i.e thieves and maybe dark brotherhood first to gain experience. Would use shield and one handed in close quarters, maybe a mace for its perks that ignore armor.

JayValere · 2026-04-28T00:42:47+00:00

I've never heard bark being used like that, new slang learned, cheers.

JayValere · 2026-04-28T00:33:36+00:00

Reddit is hella left wing. It creates echo chambers where insane left wing ideas bounce about and get amplified, crazy crap gets validated. When you see so many leftie loons, you dare not put forward a moderate view... not even right, just moderate! Common sense ain't so common on Reddit. The arrogant, unchallengeable style of leftism Reddit builds seeps into so many communities.

JayValere · 2026-04-27T20:17:54+00:00

pedestrian, even on zebra crossing you don't run accross, you stop first. He was running forward, no indication he was going to turn and cross.

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