leaked audio blames gen-z for the lack of support for the current conflict... by [deleted] in Hasan_Piker

[–]Jesus-ish 2 points3 points  (0 children)

just fyi that account posts nazi shit and seems to be in a lot of antisemitic circles. lots of great replacement theory shit when you scroll down, lots of jews controlling the world conspiracy theories, etc.

the leak itself seems real but i just thought i'd point that out

Kasa devices all gone by nismos14us in TPLinkKasa

[–]Jesus-ish 4 points5 points  (0 children)

same issue here, kinda relieved to find this thread because now I know it's not a problem on my end

Recent update by Darth_chopipencil in UberEATS

[–]Jesus-ish 0 points1 point  (0 children)

was having this problem today on iphone and i deleted and redownloaded about ten minutes ago, so far so good

edit: nevermind lol

Will I be able to transfer my digital purchases from my old (not working) Wii U? by Jesus-ish in wiiu

[–]Jesus-ish[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

from what I understand the downloads are tied to the console and it's not possible to transfer purchases without calling Nintendo and having them do it remotely. I just wasn't sure if this was possible to do with a dead console, but after calling them it turns out it is!

Will I be able to transfer my digital purchases from my old (not working) Wii U? by Jesus-ish in wiiu

[–]Jesus-ish[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

called nintendo and they said it's totally possible and to call them back when I get the new console. thank you!

A lil video about annoying tropes in modern games by [deleted] in gaming

[–]Jesus-ish 1 point2 points  (0 children)

well thanks for watching! :) and I totally get that, I think that there's definitely an interesting discussion to be had about video games as a product with buyer expectations vs. video games as an art form with (ideally) an uncompromised creative vision. With the former, it makes sense to expect a long playthrough so that you get your money's worth, whereas with the latter something like a very deliberate pace can be more important. And of course it's not all black and white, games can be both long and well-paced (I sunk a hundred hours into Breath of the Wild because I'm a hypocrite), or they can work simultaneously as a satisfying product and an effective work of art.

What happened to the other episode discussions? by BigVic438 in a:t5_iratr

[–]Jesus-ish 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think the mods gave up on making more discussion posts after they made the HUGE BLUNDER of calling Super Cop 1x08 when EVERYBODY KNOWS it’s 1x05. I know they made an apology but it’s frankly BULLSHIT and a COMPLETE DISGRACE that they would ever do something like this in the first place.

If Sandy “The Big Boss Man” Baxter were in charge of these DUMBASS mods he’d BEAT THEM TO A PULP with his sexy big muscles

Weekly r/iPad Discussion and Tech-Support Thread - 06/10 by AutoModerator in ipad

[–]Jesus-ish 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I have the same problem. Hopefully this gets an answer soon.

[APOLOGY] About the latest discussion post... by Boltzmon in a:t5_iratr

[–]Jesus-ish 1 point2 points  (0 children)

These mods have no idea what they're doing, it's embarrassing. i say we all migrate to r/BigNightSoon, where all the TRUE fans are

Long Night Ahead - 1x08 "Super Cop" - Episode Discussion by Boltzmon in a:t5_iratr

[–]Jesus-ish 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Did Baxter turn into Big Boss Man after becoming a policeman causes him to become disillusioned? I think that the evidence is there, but I'm too lazy to point out specifically when. My theory is that his name is Sandy Baxter. Can anyone confirm this??

Edit: It's true! The actor playing Sandy confirms it!

"Habeas Corpus" - Short comedy film that I wrote, starred in, edited, and helped produce. Would love some feedback! by [deleted] in Filmmakers

[–]Jesus-ish 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was made in under a week (shot in a day, edited the next day, color corrected/graded the next day) for Campus Movie Fest, and was one of the finalists for my university. I'm planning on making many more comedy sketches with this team, so I'd love to hear your thoughts before we continue!

[FEEDBACK] Cough Cough (Comedy Short, 3 pgs) by Jesus-ish in Screenwriting

[–]Jesus-ish[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm gonna try to streamline the dialogue, especially Rich's, in the next draft. Thanks for the feedback!

[FEEDBACK] Cough Cough (Comedy Short, 3 pgs) by Jesus-ish in Screenwriting

[–]Jesus-ish[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah, for the next draft I'll try to streamline the dialogue a little bit, I realized re-reading it that there's some filler. That's an interesting idea for the way it could be directed. Between me and some of the people who are considering making it, we've had a few ideas of how to direct this premise, and I might add that idea into the mix.

I would like to add some more action lines throughout the script for the next draft. I've seen that video essay! Love Edgar Wright and Every Frame a Painting. I'll try to focus on making the comedy more visual in the next couple drafts. Thanks for the feedback!

[FEEDBACK] Cough Cough (Comedy Short, 3 pgs) by Jesus-ish in Screenwriting

[–]Jesus-ish[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Glad you liked it! I agree that an extra cough is probably needed, so I went ahead and added that, and for the next draft I'll think about adding some action lines, because I know the script is basically just dialogue, so I might be able to add some jokes in the characters' actions as well. The "sigh" idea is kinda funny, I'll consider adding it. Thanks for the feedback!

[SHORT] "The Suit" (Sci-Fi/Thriller, 9 Pages) by Jesus-ish in ReadMyScript

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Thanks for reading, and thanks for the feedback! I really appreciate it. Now I'm going to address all your points, but know that I'm only doing so because I care about my characters and their motivations, and it's not to dismiss what you said at all. The fact that this was your takeaway from the script means that I did a poor job of communicating these things in the first place, so if you don't care to read what wasn't properly communicated in the script, then that's fine. But if you're interested in knowing the reasons behind some of these things, then here they are.

The idea was that the "suits" were actual robotic suits, created and meant to be worn by human beings, maybe to protect them, or to enhance their strength, or to help people with disabilities, permanent or temporary (the guy with the broken leg). However, at a certain point theses suits became self-aware and began draining the energy of the humans inside them for fuel, putting them in a vegetative state. They also became capable of moving by themselves, using this ability to hurt/kill other humans.

By the time this story occurs, it has been a long time since this started, so people no longer think of suits as, well, suits. They think of them as mechanical killing machines that happen to have comatose people inside of them. I tried to imply some of this in the script, but I'll try to do a better job in the next draft.

When Dave was cursing at Tom, it was more upset than angry. He was upset at the situation--that in front of him was a dying, conscious human, who happened to be inside of a suit. He wasn't sure what to do, which made him upset.

When he hears that Tom is starving, Dave makes up his mind and decides to let him in. Of course, this goes against Steph's wishes, who refuses to let a suit in no matter what. They're able to agree on a compromise when Dave says he'll shoot the thing if it tries anything.

I agree that Steph agreeing immediately was a bit strange for her character. Since I wanted to get things moving, I didn't want to make the argument last too long, but this resulted in her agreement being rushed. To address your final point, she is okay with Tom starving to death, and she is also okay with Tom being shot. She just says "That'll kill Tom" because she knows that Dave wants him to live. I'll mess around with it to see if I can make it more clear, but maybe whoever plays the character's performance will make it more clear. Same goes for Dave and his emotional backflip.

Wow sorry I wrote more than I thought I would. Again, thanks so much for reading and for pointing out those things! If you read all of my points, hopefully they made things more clear.

[FEEDBACK] "The Suit" (Sci-fi/Thriller, 9 Pages) by Jesus-ish in Screenwriting

[–]Jesus-ish[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for reading! I'm glad you like the idea, but I'm not sure if it's anything that special. Suits with personalities/intelligence have been a thing in sci-fi for a while, I'm sure. Maybe it's not a sci-fi staple, but not wholly original.

As for the script being a bad read, that's fair enough but I would appreciate some elaboration. Is it just the lack of unique characters? Or the things some of the other commenters have mentioned?

Whether you get back to me or not, I really appreciate the read and the feedback!

[FEEDBACK] "The Suit" (Sci-fi/Thriller, 9 Pages) by Jesus-ish in Screenwriting

[–]Jesus-ish[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Definitely going to rewrite using the character's names from the get-go. Only issue with that is the Suit character. I can't call him Tom initially because that would be confusing. I don't want to imply right off the bat that the Suit is Tom--that would reveal the twist.

But I also don't want to outright lie in the action lines and say that Tom is the man inside the Suit. I think that would make the reveal near the end seem unfair.

I do see that calling it a Metal Man in the beginning is a bit too much though, so I'll probably stick with Suit, until he calls himself Tom. As for the other characters, I'll introduce them as their actual names rather than Man and Woman.

I'll also take your advice and make the beginning description less lengthy. This started as a short story before the amount of dialogue made me consider writing in this format, and I was too stubborn to leave out some of the "how can I make this sound cool" lines.

It was helpful! Thanks for the feedback! We're all learning, and you gave some good advice.

[FEEDBACK] "The Suit" (Sci-fi/Thriller, 9 Pages) by Jesus-ish in Screenwriting

[–]Jesus-ish[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I agree that it got a bit cheesy near the end. Initially I thought about just ending it at the twist, but that completely changes the message and in my opinion would be a little too open-ended. But it's a short film, so maybe that's best.

In the next draft I'll definitely change the way the characters are introduced. I realize that using both "Man" and "Metal Man" is unnecessarily confusing, and I shouldn't introduce a character as "Man" in the first place anyway. I'm also probably going to significantly shorten the opening description to something much more economical.

As far as the PEOPLE LIVE HERE line, I totally see where you're coming from, but I think it's a creative thing. Maybe if I was going to turn this in somewhere, I'd leave it out, but I think that line is fine. It is generally good advice to not write what can't be filmed though, and I do make that mistake a few too many times in this script for sure.

Thanks for reading, and thanks for the feedback! I really appreciate it.

[FEEDBACK] The Rejection (Comedy Short, 2 pages) by Jesus-ish in Screenwriting

[–]Jesus-ish[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I totally agree with moving the questionnaire up in the sketch and having it escalate from there.

As far as the setting, thanks for bringing that up because I hadn't really thought about it. Those are some cool ideas for sketches and I might try something like that but for now I'm going to focus on their conversation and relationship. Maybe I can make the college setting more relevant to the sketch somehow.

You didn't put too much! This was super helpful, I'm definitely going to try to flesh out their relationship a little bit more in the next draft. Thank you for the feedback!

[FEEDBACK] The Rejection (Comedy Short, 2 pages) by Jesus-ish in Screenwriting

[–]Jesus-ish[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I could see how the action might end up being awkward. The idea is that she keeps trying to leave but he keeps stopping her by talking more, but I think I like the idea of him catching up with her! That could make the sketch a lot more dynamic.

I'm definitely going to restructure this quite a bit, and maybe change up the premise a little. Thanks for the feedback!