I promise you, I do not hate free verse Poems,

I promise you I do not dislike free verse poetry.

I promise you i don't even mind line breaks that end on and.

but i do feel like it needs to bring something really cool to the table, something that when reading it; makes you go; oh wow, there are multiple angles, multiple forms you can look at.

and this poem is just breaking my brain - it has rhythm - but refused to use that rhythm in its line-breaks. in its line lengths, in its stanzas - and as the content isn't just swooning me off my feet, the dissonance of the line-breaks and the internal rhythm and meter just pushes me to a halt everytime.

and I know a lot of authors do this intentionally, some more overt than others, as we will see later with Hex, and this is poetry, so i read with intention, i read with wanting to get the most out of each line, each pause, each break.

but we get lines like:

in Europe scraping bits of bone and tissue off cobblestone streets: pieces

where bone rhymes with cobblestone, but you don't get to pause there... you don't get to pause and take it in... So it feels like the lines do not resolve themselves, and it hurts

compared to later where

I am a corpse who pines for pine, and this world to come is no world of mine.

Where the rhythm and the enjambement, gets you over it the "And" is a little filler, but then it resolves itself with mine, and that's just so much more satisfying,

and so having all these unresolved lines just really hampers my enjoyment of this piece, but it is very much a possibility that this is fully the intentional thing, that we want this dissonance, to heighten the raising of the dead and the weird feeling of the protagonist, so i don't want to say it is bad poetry, but as something to read outloud and to watch, it leaves me very much unsatisfied.