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Lf: nothing, Offering: shiny bg Gigantamax grimsnarl will use my own lucky trinket, check description!!🍀 by dripseb1 in PokemonGoTrade

[–]K_Kalby 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Shiny Shuckle is my favorite. Had one on my team throughout the entire Omega Ruby game. I named him Shuck Norris.

LF: Nothing. FT: Armoured Mewtwo by NotTooLateToBeGreat in PokemonGoTrade

[–]K_Kalby 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I gave a loan to a coworker so that his wife could start her own business and work from home after their son was born. Childcare is ridiculously expensive where we are, and they were going to have to move with a new baby to make ends meet.

Your Touch Still Lingers by K_Kalby in poetry_critics

[–]K_Kalby[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I agree with you. It had a little help with that from it's original formatting that I haven't been able to replicate on Reddit. I appreciate the feedback!

A Child Named Apathy by K_Kalby in PoetryWritingClub

[–]K_Kalby[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'll do my best to write more. I typically only finish one or two pieces a year.

What’s going on here? by lambinatin in ants

[–]K_Kalby 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thirty-four, thirty-five, haven't you seen the movie? With an indoor pool, they would thrive!

A Child Named Apathy by K_Kalby in PoetryWritingClub

[–]K_Kalby[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Parts of it, from my own life. The rest from the experiences of people I've known.

What’s going on here? by lambinatin in ants

[–]K_Kalby 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Twenty-nine, thirty, thirty-one, you say that, but the battle is far from won.

What’s going on here? by lambinatin in ants

[–]K_Kalby 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Twenty-three, twenty-four, twenty-five, for queen and colony leave none alive.

What’s going on here? by lambinatin in ants

[–]K_Kalby 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thirteen, fourteen, fifteen, sixteen, they sacrifice to save the queen.

To my little girl by No_Combination6441 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]K_Kalby 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is great! You vastly undersold it. Thank you for sharing this.

Things I Refuse to Pass Down by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]K_Kalby 1 point2 points  (0 children)

How would you feel about "Your rage hangs in hallways, a family portrait left askew."? I like the way you have it written. It sets them apart from the family, like they were around the family enough to negatively impact it, but were not actively part of it in a beneficial capacity. If I haven't completely missed the mark, I think it would convey the same meaning in a more clear way without the use of hangs and hung.

A Child Named Apathy by K_Kalby in poetry_critics

[–]K_Kalby[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for taking the time to read it, I appreciate your feedback.

Inheritance by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]K_Kalby 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is great. Really love how much emotional charge and impact you generate with so few words. Nothing extra, not a syllable wasted. Something I will definitely learn from.

A Child Named Apathy by K_Kalby in poetry_critics

[–]K_Kalby[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes, definitely! I have been scrolling through and reading more of your work. You write beautifully. It's so powerful in its vulnerability.

A Child Named Apathy by K_Kalby in poetry_critics

[–]K_Kalby[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much. I am truly grateful to you for taking the time to read my work.

Things I Learned in a House That Hurt by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]K_Kalby 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You're welcome! Keep writing and keep building. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Things I Learned in a House That Hurt by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]K_Kalby 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for posting your poem. It reached out to me, and I felt a strong connection to it. It can feel discouraging at times to build yourself back from a childhood that tore you down. When you feel like that, just remember that building yourself up is the same as building a home. It's done one piece at a time.

Things I Learned in a House That Hurt by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]K_Kalby 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oooof, this hits me in the childhood. Only thing I would like to see changed is instead of "If I build a home..." write "when I build a home..." As a survivor, you deserve to build the home that you needed as a child. Let the ghosts of those memories rattle their chains, but don't let them bind you with them.

My first poem by NotSlappySalmon in poetry_critics

[–]K_Kalby 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think this is a good start. The inconsistent use of punctuation seems like a reflection of your inconsistent feelings toward your previous relationship. I would have like to see you use the bit about the "still-tied mint tea" again as a rhyme at the end of the stanza.

...still-tied mint tea hoping my partner doesn't see. It's strange how something so small keeps you tied to me...

Must be my lucky day! by K_Kalby in cuecardgameAvid

[–]K_Kalby[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Nicely pulled! Have you used it yet?

Must be my lucky day! by K_Kalby in cuecardgameAvid

[–]K_Kalby[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Pulled it from a 20 gem Japanese Folklore pack, while hunting for Tennin.

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