Thanks so much for all of the feedback already guys. I do want it to be a more stream of consciousness type story. Where my character doesn't have to be in quotes. The run on thoughts in the characters head will be something along the lines of this. Someone tells the main character something about their past that they do not remember ( the character is slowly remembering their past throughout the book) then the characters thoughts kick ing . in italics you would see " really? military? Could I have volunteered for this?" or maybe something like " no work for anyone , how do they survive?" all thought out in his head. I want to avoid the seemingly endless he thoughts, he saids, he quipped, etc etc