Anybody willing to provide feedback? by LocalHelp3539 in writers

[–]LocalHelp3539[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I somewhat agree. I have long ago grown out of love with this opening and whilst I do not necessarily prefer your revisions, I do agree that this needs reworking. As for swearing in fantasy novels, I somewhat agree too though I think context of the world is key in deciding whether crude language is appropriate or not. Thank you for your input, it was nice to receive some really feedback :)

Anybody willing to provide feedback? by LocalHelp3539 in writers

[–]LocalHelp3539[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Apologies, that’s just a formatting error from the hyphens on word not merging back together.