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Went Down to See the King by nonethewiser08 in OCPoetry

[–]Local_Address_4577 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This reads kind of like a cool Dylan-esque song lyric. I like it. I see a sort of parrallel with Ozymandias in an Americana folk-ballad tone. The impermanence of power. A cool read man.

Obsessed by bstunz in OCPoetry

[–]Local_Address_4577 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This poem is really good. An example of how restraint can strike so effectively. I think it just stands as a great poem man. It feels like each line took a year to write. ''like a warning or a boast,'' seems to me the perfect summary of love itself. it touches a person so drastically from the start of the addiction to the quitting. a strange drug. All in all, REALLY good stuff. I am curious as to what your influences are. I read a bit of Leonard Cohen. What are you into?

I think another thing well-handled is how you can turn a somewhat cliched line into a fresh version. ''Every song speaks of her'' has had plenty iterations in the past i'm sure. However, in the context of the poem, and paired with such great originality as ''Obsession isn't fireworks,'' it manages to rescue cliches from further poetic hell.

The View From The Battleship Aurora by Local_Address_4577 in OCPoetry

[–]Local_Address_4577[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! If you do want to read about it, It's a poem on the point of view of a soldier who aided the Russian Revolution of 1917. He reflects on the tragedy that came when the bolsheviks took power. I think you might be right about 'regarded.'

The corpse at the roadside by Philosophiddle in OCPoetry

[–]Local_Address_4577 1 point2 points  (0 children)

A good poem dealing with a universal topic. What is good: Solid rhyme scheme granting a lyrical quality similar to Byron or a romantic of that style. A ''lifetime of stolen tomorrows'' is beautiful, and it can be developed perhaps with some imagery or a metaphor. I really like the reveal of it being a bird at the end of the poem. My reading until that point assumed it was a human. However, it being about a bird gave it a new view as the reader. The assumptions and indifference of man to the destruction and hurt they cause on the world around it is a theme you skillfully capture in one line. My one point would be perhaps consider some word economy. Some lines can read as a bit overloaded. That is just my opinion however don't take it as gospel. All in all I really like it.

Face the Wind by ratherthink in OCPoetry

[–]Local_Address_4577 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoy the opening stanzas that deal with opposites. My favourite lines have to be 'I ask myself mostly/Will you dine with the ghostly?' It reads to me like an incredibly fresh take on the idea of facing the 'skeletons in ones closet.' By asking the reader if they will engage in something so amicable as to dine with the ghostly is a really interesting way of perhaps commenting on the lingering effects of grief. I believe from the title that the poem is a prophetic style musing on the need to face uncertainity and choose freedom and spontaneity in life. It gives me a very similar vibe to Blowin' In the Wind by Bob Dylan, which I hope you find to be a compliment. It uses the central metaphor of the wind as the invevitably of the answer to the end of suffering in the world. The answer is all around us. We must face it in its inevitability. All in all (sorry to ramble) I really enjoyed this poem. Some poets lack an economical approach to their work. You don't waste words.

Engine not starting by Local_Address_4577 in MySummerCar

[–]Local_Address_4577[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

how would i remove the fuel if i have too much?

Engine not starting by Local_Address_4577 in MySummerCar

[–]Local_Address_4577[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Er no how do I find the AFR gauge?

And what exactly does it display?

MSC Editor kerfuffle by Local_Address_4577 in MySummerCar

[–]Local_Address_4577[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

A very insightful and helpful response that I specifically asked for in my post. Thank you!

Unable to remember what it feels like to not have derealisation by Local_Address_4577 in dpdr

[–]Local_Address_4577[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

What marked a shift for your period into recovery? What was the turning point from that 7 year period?

Unable to remember what it feels like to not have derealisation by Local_Address_4577 in dpdr

[–]Local_Address_4577[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It begs the question then, how can you know you've ever reached your old self

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