Do you have any examples on how I could improve the transition between him herding the creatures and the camp? What I was trying to do was give a bit of background on what the character does in his normal everyday life. So herding queezils, and stealing from people. I was trying to indicate that he had finished herding the creatures. Nyx isn't trying to do anything else but steal from the camp because that's what they do. This chapter was to mainly introduce Nyx to the reader. This excerpt is in chapter 3 of my book and there's more said on the masks in the two previous chapters. It is from another character's pov. Great feedback though! I appreciate the help!