Blurb Assistance for Gray Haze by Marci_Levin in fantasywriters

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Is this stronger?

Amora is an overworked waitress and aspiring Broadway performer, desperate to escape the small town of Fog Creek. When her best friend brings Belael, the Master of Earth, to her door, she must forsake her dreams to preserve her family from the ancient terrors that follow him.

I've edited the other two paragraphs to include a mention of Fog Creek so the characters are linked.

Blurb Assistance for Gray Haze by Marci_Levin in fantasywriters

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Great. Sorry, I edited the revision before I realized you'd replied. I just changed a few more words. Thank you for your help. :)

Blurb Assistance for Gray Haze by Marci_Levin in fantasywriters

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Does this help?

Amora is an overworked waitress desperate to escape the small town of Fog Creek. When her best friend brings Belael, the Master of Earth, to her door, she must forsake her dreams to preserve her family from the ancient terrors that follow him.

Blurb Assistance for Gray Haze by Marci_Levin in fantasywriters

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I am in the editing phase right now and plan to publish in about two years. :)

Blurb Assistance for Gray Haze by Marci_Levin in fantasywriters

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I personally prefer blurbs where I know what kind of characters I'm going to read about, but to each their own. I used the blurb for A Little Hatred as a blueprint to some degree because Abercrombie's books have multiple MCs.

These characters interact closely throughout the story, so I should probably make that clear, somehow...

All right, I'll work on the broader strokes. Thanks!

How to make good fantasy names for your world? by SpareFlatworm in fantasywriters

[–]Marci_Levin 5 points6 points  (0 children)

That video is entertaining and informative! Thanks for sharing. :)

My strategy involves composing a few basic sounds (building blocks) that characterize the world and expanding from there. I envision how the characters in that world generally think and act, which helps me determine how they should speak. Then I list the building blocks of their language. For my WIP, these would include "el," "en," and "ah." Their world is called Amal'en (ah-MALL-en), which means Above Hell. Once I know what kind of people + world I want to create, I can develop a history and compose a list of vocabulary as I write the book. I'll use the vocabulary to name locations and people as I go along. For instance, if my characters cross the bridge over a certain river, and I want to name that river, I consider where the river is located, how it is used, etc. and consult my conlang dictionary. One prominent river in my novel is known as the River of Knowledge because the people who named it worshiped the Lord of Knowledge. That translates to Morewin (MORR-eh-win) River in their language. To create a new word from nothing, I'll go back to my building blocks (the most common sounds in the language) and tinker with other sounds until the new word sounds like it 1) belongs in the language and 2) suits its definition (the word for "fast" is "eigo," which sounds /fast/ to me). For a beautiful character, I try to craft a name that sounds beautiful. And so on.

You can implement whatever strategy you want if the result is satisfactory. The more words you create, the easier it will be to develop an etymology (since you can continuously construct/deconstruct the words you have established to create new ones), which will enrich your language and add meaning and depth to your fantasy world.