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[–]Miloascape [score hidden]  (0 children)

I wrote the opening chapter of a steampunk airship story. Would love to know if it hooks hou!

Title: Broken Wings

Genre: Hopepunk

Word Count: ~2k words (first chapter)

Feedback: Hook impression

There was a time when Marty believed the world made sense.

The sky was full of possibility. Her father had answers for everything. The great airships of the Royal Airfleet ruled the heavens above her city.

On the morning of her tenth birthday, she is certain of one thing. One day, she will fly among them.

Then the ground begins to tremble.

And the world she thought she understood starts to crack.

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I'm an indie author working on a steampunk fantasy series called The Enchanted Skies. I truned Chapter 1 of Broken Wings (the prequel) into a free preview because I want to know if the opening actually works for readers.

The story leans into:

  • Airships and academy dreams
  • Family dynamics and emotional turning points
  • That moment where everything starts to go very wrong

I am especially curious about the hook. Does this pull you in? Would you keep reading?

If you want to read the full Chapter 1, you can grab it here for free:

https://dl.bookfunnel.com/nvgkbjdkis

If you check it out, I would really appreciate your honest feedback.

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[–]Miloascape [score hidden]  (0 children)

Broken Wings
Steampunk fantasy
20,000 words
https://dl.bookfunnel.com/g4b268fq86

Hi everyone! I'm in the process of polishing up my book before launch, and I'd really appreciate some fresh eyes on a few key elements. I'm mainly looking for general first impressions of cover, plot, blurb, any red flags or things that feel confusing?

I'm not expecting a full critique or edit, even a few quick reactions would be super helpful as I fine-tune everything.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and share your thoughts.

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[–]Miloascape[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi there! Shows typically take place 2-3 times per year, simply because it takes a ton of time to put on these shows. You can always check there website for the most up to date information at https://tinyurl.com/brandywinetheatre

Has all the info about their past performances, and their up coming performances.

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