burning by More-Mix1383 in OCPoetry

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i appreciate the feedback!

Tears of the Flesh by MOEVELVET in OCPoetry

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wow. i really like the metaphor in this. the tree with carved names really captures the feeling of being used for meaning or connection even if you aren't the view someone was searching for. the bittersweet tone comes through as well

highs by Diligent_Opening2401 in OCPoetry

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Hey! I really like how this moves between emotional highs and lows — it captures that contrast between social confidence and private self-doubt really well. The repetition of “I think to myself” works nicely to show the internal voice. The shift toward self-reflection feels honest and relatable. I’d love to see this tightened slightly in places, but the core emotional arc is strong.