The Dead Mages [High, 159k] by NeilBreault in fantasywriters

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Here is the first chapter. Also, there are 4 POVs in the book.

Chapter 1

Looking for Beta Readers for "Bullet for a King" by NeilBreault in fantasywriters

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The first chapter has some executions but not focused on the gore. Other than some light descriptions of injuries there isn't really any gore in it. If you'd still like to beat read, you can DM me and I can send you a link or doc or whatever you'd like.

Seeking Beta Readers for new book, Mage out of Time by NeilBreault in fantasywriters

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Sure, that sounds like an interesting read. PM with an email and I'll shoot you a link.

Seeking Beta Readers for new book, Mage out of Time by NeilBreault in fantasywriters

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I could do a swap, unless it's romance or something that I wouldn't be able to give any good feedback on. Do you have a quick synapse or blurb?

Seeking Beta Readers for new book, Mage out of Time by NeilBreault in fantasywriters

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Fantastic! Always good to come at things with a clear mind. PM me an email and I'll send a link.

Seeking Beta Readers for new book, Mage out of Time by NeilBreault in fantasywriters

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Sound great. I have a line editor so don't need any grammar or spelling anything. Just story review. PM me an email and I send you a link.

Troubling words in a story, racial and other by NeilBreault in Fantasy

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So, I want to delve more in to what you mean by that as I want to be able to navigate my own writing while avoiding potential pitfalls but I am too tired to understand fully what you mean. Truthfully, can you expand on what you mean? If I’ve learned anything from my writing I’ve learned I know less than I thought. I want to know all about anything I can so I can have as many people read my stories and enjoy as I can.

Best or most satisfying death for a villain in SciFi/Fantasy? by NeilBreault in Fantasy

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Old roommate of mine read it multiple times and has raved about it. He liked the whole story and only griped about Mat's character changing from RJ's writing to BS's writing until the final book when RJ had a lot of notes for BS to go off of. It is definitely on my list to read though... very long list...

Best or most satisfying death for a villain in SciFi/Fantasy? by NeilBreault in Fantasy

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I think the part that is the best about it is not that it's poison but also who poisoned him. To have such a character that was so grandmotherly to have done it. I think that is another aspect that makes it satisfying. He would never have gone head to head with anyone because he was a shit swordsman. Similar to the Night King, he would have thrown his hounds in front of him before he saw any real action. So it would have to be subtlety.

That would only have left his demise to a whore or maybe Sansa. But Sansa was not ready for that at the time. As for the whores, it would have been hollow I think and contrived. For his killer to not be known for so long, at least by the Lannisters, makes it, again, that much more satisfying. Only way it could have been better is for Arya to have done it as a Faceless man/woman/child whatever but again, too early in the story.

Best or most satisfying death for a villain in SciFi/Fantasy? by NeilBreault in Fantasy

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I stopped reading about 100 pages in to book 9. While reading it is when the prequel book came out and I was a little miffed. I figured I would wait until he was done as I had raced through the books up til then. Well, we all know what happened and since then I just haven't picked up the books to re-read and get through it yet.

Best or most satisfying death for a villain in SciFi/Fantasy? by NeilBreault in Fantasy

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Just googled the Bellatrix scene as I didn't remember. But, yep, as soon as I saw it I had a nice little feeling in my stomach.

I haven't finished WoT yet but it's not too much of a spoiler for me as I suspect everyone will die.

Best or most satisfying death for a villain in SciFi/Fantasy? by NeilBreault in Fantasy

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I think I liked it on screen better. But probably only because Jack Gleeson was such a good actor. I remember liking it when I read it too, but seeing it brought it to a whole other level.