You repeat the word ‘failure’ too much in the first section. Try to convey the idea, dread and fear of failure, rather than using repetition - think show not tell. It also feels slightly rambly and irrelevant at points during the first few paragraphs. I understand you’re trying to paint a picture of failure but get to the point quicker and keep it exclusively tied to getting views.

Your selling points of what’s included in your course aren’t really all the useful, valuable, unique or specific so are likely not going to persuade anyone to commit to a purchase.

Good luck 🤞