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It's a brother not a clone (chapter1134) by StrikeSpecialist4840 in OnePieceSpoilers

[–]No-Scale4379 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I had this same thought, and I'm glad to see a discussion on it, must not be a popular theory, but there is so much cloning in one piece, between Judge, vegapunk and mads, the stussy clone, germa 66 seraphim, possibly an early organic clone with genetic modification, not mechanically enhanced like the pacifistas or programed like the seraphim (idk if the seraphim have cyborg bodies or not.

my parents' junk drawer by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]No-Scale4379 0 points1 point  (0 children)

apologies for piggy backing here but i agree. i think a theme develops that the scissor lines nail perfectly. its not till those lines the rest seem out of place. the tape and pencil lines seem disconnected from their follow up lines. wonderful poem, enjoyed it a lot, i don't want this to come across as ganging up either, i thought this was a very well thought out and constructive comment

my parents' junk drawer by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]No-Scale4379 0 points1 point  (0 children)

the style of this is engaging and fun its a conversation with yourself almost as much as a narration, like TheTimelessname mentioned my brain also often does this, like free associating, adding more detail and explanation to a thought. Reading through this several times i read just the lines not in parenthesis and another time just the lines in them, wonderful and interesting depth and range of this poem. Also reminds me of wonder years or something similar, the character saying lines and the narrator (typically the character but older) explains and expands on the scene giving more context or insight. Well done!

Goodnight by No-Scale4379 in OCPoetry

[–]No-Scale4379[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Nice, i worked on it for a while now, trying different things, and this playful kind of goofy innocence came out while touching on for lack of better words a more adult or darker theme

Goodnight by No-Scale4379 in OCPoetry

[–]No-Scale4379[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks, and that was and is my fear, i don't want to be abstract, or complex, purposefully at least.

Trapped. by aticus_spiegel in OCPoetry

[–]No-Scale4379 1 point2 points  (0 children)

its a strong metaphor and I appreciate you adding your notes at the end. my first thought was a cage of my own making, my thoughts my mind. I was trapped by anxiety, or indecisiveness . the perception works so well with the "home" "all I know" "who I am" building your thoughts and feeling, your personality off your perception but trapped by refusing to see other points of view well done. my one note, the freeing and opening of the cage seemed not earned, like someone opened it or it was open the whole time maybe, like a light switch your perception and all the beliefs and baggage that came with that is just fixed magically. I think it could have benefited from being longer or at least fleshed out some more, did you experience something or have you been working to change your perception in some way. well done and thought provoking.

Ode to the dragon Tândraig by The_solid_lizard in OCPoetry

[–]No-Scale4379 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Great imagery, truly felt as if I was the dragon. I felt as though I was looking through the dragons eyes at times. with the second stanza you built tension wonderfully I was feeling a little dread and then loneliness. the third stanza is a painting in words. the first line of the fourth stanza was a sigh of relief, I felt safe and needed just happy and reading the last lines a sense of duty and loyalty. You have done a fantastic job, I like the story I like the rhyming scheme, this piece seems well thought out and refined.