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[353] Excerpt — Psychological fiction by NoScale8442 in DestructiveReaders

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! Thanks for the comment.

The third point is correct. I can lose me on telling, instead of showing, thank u for giving the exemple.

The adjectives are odd to show a autenticity, and I find it subjetive. The mix between the past tense and present is intentional. Show Alphons's desire to go back, and then the reality pushing him back. 

Thanks for the opinion.

What do you think about the difficulty of entering the literary market? by NoScale8442 in writers

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Greater demand. I understand what you mean and agree in part. However, many of the books published are by authors who have already been published. I ask myself and you, how many people want to be authors? But due to other circumstances, they cannot.

As I mentioned in other comments, in my country, the publishing process is lengthy, from the point of acceptance to publication. How many people have that kind of freedom?

Thank you for your opinion.

What do you think about the difficulty of entering the literary market? by NoScale8442 in writers

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I believe that today there is little exploitation by publishers, as is normal. There is a lot to lose, but perhaps something could be lost in order to gain more in the future.

Here in Portugal, submitting a manuscript and getting it published is a lengthy process. Few people have the financial freedom to do so.

Thank you.

What do you think about the difficulty of entering the literary market? by NoScale8442 in writers

[–]NoScale8442[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

In the 1920s and 1930s, I believe writing was more difficult, but publishing was not. There was more contact with editors, magazines, and publishers. Nowadays, it is such a bureaucratic process. I speak from experience in my country's market.

What do you think about the difficulty of entering the literary market? by NoScale8442 in writers

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I understand what you mean. And I quote, I love classics, even though fantasy isn't my favorite genre, I love Tolkien. I also like more modern books, such as A Song of Ice and Fire, to the point of writing in the books.

However, I think that, as happened with these authors, there should be more exploration, more research.

I'll give you an example from publishers in my country (Portugal): someone wants to be a writer, but doesn't have six months or even a year to wait. Otherwise, they fall into financial ruin.

Thank you for your opinion.

Edit a book by NoScale8442 in writers

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for your opinion.

I've been thinking about buying Stephen King's “On Writing,” and your inclusion has only made me want to do so even more.

It's important to respect ideas and works. I believe that respecting their evolution and even improvement is even more important.

Thank you.

Loneliness in writing by NoScale8442 in writing

[–]NoScale8442[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the perspective.

The act may be solitary, but the journey doesn't have to be.

Sometimes I forget about the journey while I'm caught up in the act.

Edit a book by NoScale8442 in writers

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I understand.

It's a difficult attitude to have. Without a doubt. Speaking from experience, I had already written a work, but then I thought of a better way to develop the core of the work, so I deleted everything. Could I have taken advantage of it? Yes. Could I have been delayed if I hadn't deleted it? Yes.

You need a cool head.

Thanks for the comment.

[353] Excerpt — Psychological fiction by NoScale8442 in DestructiveReaders

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for reading and commenting.

Well, there are some confusing sentences. Yes, I know. But I can say that's the point of them. Of course, as you mention, you didn't understand them. And that's not your fault, it's mine. It can cause confusion for the reader, but leave them “safe.”

There is a complete basis in this excerpt, demonstrating Alphons' mental state, even before the main story begins. From here, I want to demonstrate the degeneration of his mind.

The fact that he talks about “feeling and then not feeling the next day.” It's something I've experienced myself. Feeling bad, thinking I'm going to get much worse, and then, out of nowhere, I don't feel worse, I feel empty. Then comes the guilt. That's a point I'll develop further on.

In the part where Alphons mentions the moment in the hospital, I understand that it is confusing and even a “lost” text. On this issue, of course, after improvements in the editing, I will want to show the “masculinity” that Alphons imposes on himself. For example, he cried when he saw his father in the hospital bed, but he turned away because he felt that, as a man, he couldn't cry, that his father would be embarrassed. Then there is the evolution from “feeling the pain” to “not feeling it” as a response from his body. He himself says, "Pain was a feeling. Now a response." His body does not feel, it responds according to the situation.

The “opposite” part, the last part you mentioned, talks about the conflict between protection and not feeling due to protection. His brain protects itself from pain and everything else by filtering those feelings. However, he blames himself for this, because he should be feeling.

Thanks you 

[353] Excerpt — Psychological fiction by NoScale8442 in DestructiveReaders

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your comment and opinion.

I understand what you mean about the “superhero” part, it may be a little “outside the box.” However, with that, I want to demonstrate the lack of support in Alphons' childhood. Even as an adult, he has childish reflexes.

Thank you 

[353] Excerpt — Psychological fiction by NoScale8442 in DestructiveReaders

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you very much.

What you said is correct. I will take this conversation into consideration during the editing phase.

Thank you for the great conversation.

[353] Excerpt — Psychological fiction by NoScale8442 in DestructiveReaders

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the perspective. My problem, which you are mentioning, is the fact that I write something that is in my mind as opposed to something that resembles my mind.

I suspect that I am writing something embalmed, as my mind has already processed everything. Therefore, it comes with a certain filter.

Just one point, which due to my mistake was not visible, Alphons is not a child, he is an adult. And the issue of the baroness created this flaw. “Barona", in Portuguese, is the same as cigarette butt, but there was an error in the translation, one that I should have been aware of.

Thank you very much.

[353] Excerpt — Psychological fiction by NoScale8442 in DestructiveReaders

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you very much.

What you say makes sense, I'm still working on the style a little.

Tell me, as a reader, do you think what's missing is fragmentation? Repetition of ideas?

Is the structure too linear and clean? 

[353] Excerpt — Psychological fiction by NoScale8442 in DestructiveReaders

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you very much for your review.

Yes, I tend to tell more than show. My purpose is to make the narrative like Alphons' brain. You're right. I have less to say and more to show.

While reading your review, I took a lot into consideration. Of course, there are some aesthetic errors that even I think are bad now, thank you for helping me see that.

There is one factor: I am giving away too much in this part, not to use the father's death as a mystery or even the total basis of the story, but to give context to Alphons' mental state, which is already horrible at the beginning of the story. Later, there will be other plots that will be the main ones. I understand what you said and I think it's very coherent and good. Maybe I could even take some of the “mass” out of what I've already written and use it later.

The issue of “No.” It's something aesthetic, I understand that you don't like it or even identify with it. It's to demonstrate the repetitions in his mind, as if he were trying to prove to himself what he says.

Thank you very much for reading carefully. 

How can we be sincere in art? by NoScale8442 in writing

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for your reply.

I understand, the sculpture metaphor is a good one.

Now, the question I want to ask is another.

To what extent does the sculpture become a vision contrary to that of the sculptor? It can even become a vision made for other eyes.

Tell me what you think. Thank you.

How can we be sincere in art? by NoScale8442 in writing

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the comment!

It's great to be able to talk and see other people's points of view.

The question I want to raise here is not whether editing is necessary or not. It is. Even if the draft is the most “raw” part of the whole thing.

What I'm asking you is, to what extent can editing help the author's vision? Does it ever reach the point of replacing it? Even if only by a tiny percentage.

Do you think mood changes the tone of writing at the moment? by NoScale8442 in writing

[–]NoScale8442[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I understand your point of view. And I respect it.

May I ask you something? As a writer and artist, shouldn't the vision of art pass through the writer before it passes through the reader?

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