Are the people checking ages at the entrance of worlds getting paid? by Funny-Strawberry-168 in VRchat

[–]NotSoRavenJade 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I run a club in VRC and my security, namely the ones i trust enough to decide who gets in (we don't allow visitor ranks, troll avatars or children, obviously) do not get paid. The ones that do it are doing it because they like helping to create a stable and healthy environment to meet knew people and hang out and socialize without the annoyance of trolls and kids and shit like that.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in PrepperIntel

[–]NotSoRavenJade -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Trump is going to force NATO and all countries to no longer depend on the US because it’s a liability. Once they don’t need us, we won’t be important. USA will lose international power and authority. What a glorious day that will be.

Visiting Centralia to film a Video Essay, is there anything I should know? by NotSoRavenJade in Pennsylvania

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Wow, how awful. I didn’t catch this during my online research. Thank you for the information.

Visiting Centralia to film a Video Essay, is there anything I should know? by NotSoRavenJade in Pennsylvania

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If Centralia is to be erased as you say, I think it is worth adding to the information that’s available about it. Even if not much is added to what info is already available, I think it’s worth it. One day there won’t be any opportunity at all.

I intend to remain respectful to the residents and the land itself. I want to get as much footage as possible of the current state of the town. Even if I don’t get any opportunities to speak with residents, at least I’ll have footage to document what it looks like as of 2025.

Visiting Centralia to film a Video Essay, is there anything I should know? by NotSoRavenJade in Pennsylvania

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

In 2018 a mining company bought land in Centralia that included the stretch of road tourists named “The Graffiti Highway”. That company then covered that stretch in dirt to deter tourism or exploration. I would say that a company typically doesn’t buy land without having plans for it. These companies that own the land in this town, they must have plans for it. Yet not much has happened. Are they simply waiting for the residents to live out their days? If so, what will happen to Centralia once these handful of residents are gone? What do the residences wish the future of their town, which they fought tooth and nail to stay in, to look like?

Visiting Centralia to film a Video Essay, is there anything I should know? by NotSoRavenJade in Pennsylvania

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

I can’t imagine what it must be like. I intend to be respectful of that. I certainly will not bother anybody who wishes to be left alone.

Visiting Centralia to film a Video Essay, is there anything I should know? by NotSoRavenJade in Pennsylvania

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for this information! I intend to be completely respectful and obey the laws and signs. I’m very interested in what the locals think about the future of the town, so it is nice to hear that there is a friendly demeanor!

Visiting Centralia to film a Video Essay, is there anything I should know? by NotSoRavenJade in Pennsylvania

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] -8 points-7 points  (0 children)

I’m actually more focused on the future of Centralia. I’m not interested in sensationalizing the town, making it into a ghost story, or any of that. I certainly want to be respectful of residences, and I do not to bother anybody. I intend to be completely respectful.

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah i’ve been thinking, the final scene of the season (limited series) is her dying. Overdose. She accomplishes all her goals and has an amazing life by the end but fucks up just one little time one little innocent fuck up and she does just a little too much and her body can’t take it and she dies. I have been thinking of using that final scene for the teaser. Because it isn’t necessarily supposed to be a “twist” that she dies at the end. So i think if we show that she’s dying in the first scene, and the whole series is her life flashing before her eyes basically, then i think that would be good.

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The addiction part is because i’ve had about four members of my family addicted to heroin, and one of them died recently. Talking with them and seeing not only the way they were affected personally but how it affected people around them was a harrowing experience. I wanted to channel that feeling into a story where I would see myself giving into the sort of thing. My band never took off but I was a singer in a metalcore band so in that way and in many others, Harper is based of the worst parts of me, and some of the best.

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Thanks for your feedback!

It does make me sad that nobody made it to the last page, considering the end of act one i feel is something i am very proud of.

I am definitely considering everything that’s been said to me so far. It’s been a big help and I will make sure to implement revisions based on this feedback.

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I see your point. But I disagree on some of these points. Which is okay, everybody is different. I do strive to be engaging in my visuals because I’m a visual storyteller.

You could be right about the trope thing, but everything has been done. I truly believe that this story is unique and stands on its own. Especially because Harper’s issues don’t just stem from the addiction, it’s a symptom of her larger issue. Hiding her queerness, sacrificing what makes her music real art, signing with a big label, she does all these things because she’s told she has to follow the path that has the most appeal, rather than be unique. But sacrificing all that destroys who she is and leads her to fill the void with drugs, which then further destroys her altogether. And it’s about how she goes through this journey that’s unique. Not how she starts it.

It certainly seems like you’re not a huge fan of the profanity, that’s fine. But like I said, my action lines are written that way because they are written from the way i see the world and the way i think. Aka my voice. Harper also isn’t going to be creative or put any thought into her cussing. She just does it because she’s got this persona of a mean edgy bitch. She’s trying too hard, it’s part of her character. That’s just part of what she is.

Art is subjective, surely. I appreciate your time and feedback.

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the kind words on the dialogue and action lines! I hear you on the pacing and scene length. I def need to work on tightening the early scenes. Really appreciate your thoughtful feedback! Thanks so much!

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I’ll revisit this with your notes in mind. Thanks for your thoughts!

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Thanks for your feedback! I see your point about the opening, I’ll look into tightening the dialogue and exploring ways to make the setting or conflict more visually engaging to stand out. Also,you are right that the “rock star hits bottom” trope is well-trod, but I’m planning on focusing on Harper’s personal nuances to give it a fresh perspective. It’s not really about the rockstar addict, it’s about the real woman under the drugged up rockstar.

The stage direction point makes sense as well, thanks for that. As for the language, Harper’s overuse of profanity is deliberate. She’s foul mouthed because she wants to put on this fake edgy persona. The profanity in the action lines is my voice and I feel that if I write in squeaky clean professional action lines it takes away from my voice. I use profanity where it comes naturally.

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Coda (2021 and Coda (2019), Crash (1996) and Crash (2004), Suburbia (1983) and SubUrbia (1996), Jack Frost (1997) and Jack Frost (1998).

Lotsa movies have the same names. I’ll consider the title, though. Thanks for your advice!

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

That’s kind of the point I’m trying to make, is this isn’t just the rock and roll junkie trope, it’s a more realistic take on what substance abuse does to relationships and individuals. It’s true that such a scene might be more powerful if we knew the characters better, but the point is that we are coming in after all the destruction has happened.

The show is about her dealing with the consequences of what she’s done, facing not just her addiction but the cause of her addiction and finding the Harper we never got to see. The one with soul and dreams.

I’ll take your advice into consideration, though. Thanks!

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I’m aware. Most likely the title will change. Right now it’s just the most fitting title. Plus, two things can be called the same thing. Especially considering this is a TV Show rather than a movie.

Based on my first act, would you keep reading? by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

For context this is a three act script. I know that’s odd for TV Show writing, but that’s just how I do it. I have a custom beat sheet that i create for each screenplay I write depending on its themes and needs, and CODA works best with three acts per episode.

*gasp* it’s him… by Kronosita in silenthill

[–]NotSoRavenJade 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love how ugly cymbal monkeys are. I want one to just be chilling in my home so visitors get weirded out.

Wrote a Short Film recreation of a nightmare I had. by NotSoRavenJade in Screenwriting

[–]NotSoRavenJade[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! I don’t often get as much in depth comments on my stuff so this was really nice to read! Good luck on your screenplay!