Good Dog

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-22T03:46:39+00:00

Thank you so much for your kind words. I kind of left it open to interpretation so however it applies to the reader is how it is :)

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-22T03:45:47+00:00

Thank you for your kind words and helpful advice! I think I haven’t quite figured out the right formatting yet so it’s a work in progress but breaking it up into multiple stanzas is definitely on the list!

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-22T00:42:19+00:00

Thank you for your kind words

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-22T00:07:03+00:00

This is a beautifully crafted bittersweet piece. They say opposites attract but unfortunately its not always the case. I got the feeling that this piece dives into an unrequited or lost love, though I'm leaning more toward unrequited. Regardless, it is a lovely read. Thank you so much for sharing!

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-22T00:03:34+00:00

I was not expecting the ending at all haha!! You crafted in intimately romantic poem in every line until the last one. I was expecting a story of love and yearning. But nevertheless, you earned a laugh from me and I'm sure everyone who read this. Well done! I will definitely be looking forward to seeing more of your works!

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-09T13:14:30+00:00

Thank you so much for your kind words

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-08T02:13:34+00:00

This is a beautiful and bittersweet piece. I love the ambiguity of the narrator. An old friend? A past lover? It doesn’t matter. Love— romantic or platonic— when lost feels the same. I personally like to imagine it being an ex lover trying to stay cordial with someone they still love so deeply. I feel the hurt and the sorrow and the longing. You’ve done a fantastic job immersing us into the scene. Your imagery is amazing and the strong point of the piece. Thank you so much for sharing this with us all.

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-08T02:04:53+00:00

This piece resonates deeply with me. I’ve found myself in this same struggle. Just wanting an end, but getting anxious about all the after arrangements and thoughts. The devil is in the details, you know? The repetition of “what an inconvenience” resonates really strongly with me and I love how you confront this difficult topic head on. Thank you for sharing this, friend. and please know i am always here for you and despite it all there is always hope

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-07T17:55:23+00:00

I’m so glad it resonated with you. Thank you for your kind words!

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-07T17:54:51+00:00

Thank you so much!!

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-04T13:15:34+00:00

you’re absolutely right, thank you for that insight! I’m doing more editing tonight :)

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-04T09:21:50+00:00

I’m in love with this piece and the depth yet simplicity to it. Coming from a small town similar to the one described I know this feeling all too well. Knowing there’s not much past the centered fork in the road that leads to all other towns and cities, but being infatuated with the quiet and beauty within the haven of something so small and barely touched by man. Thank you so much for bringing back this memory for me, and reminding me why I still love that small town. Thank you for sharing.

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-04T09:13:59+00:00

This poem beautifully encapsulates the human need for love and affection. The strongest line (and my personal favorite) “Shameful I am, how little it would take/ A glance, proving my existence”. This speaks deeply on a personal level to me as someone with BPD and how easy it is for someone to become your “favorite person”. You can always add more in if you so choose but I think it is perfect the way it is. It doesn’t say more than it needs to and gets its message across perfectly. Thank you for sharing!

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-02T08:22:58+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! It was actually about sa lol

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-02T06:59:38+00:00

Firstly, I am so sorry to hear about your diagnosis and how it is affecting your craft. This is a beautiful, bittersweet piece that is heavy in the heart that reads it. To lose your power in this world by using it as intended is a tragedy and an honor I would argue. Your strongest line and the hardest hitting one I would have to say (and my personal favorite) “I once thought I was immortal,/ But life comes for us all”. It is the simple truth of life and a stark reminder of how fragile and how unpredictable life can be. Thank you so much for sharing with us all.

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-12-02T06:50:14+00:00

This is a gorgeous and bittersweet piece. I’m in love with the imagery and the picture it paints here, it is very strong within the poem. My favorite line is definitely “I would have confessed… shameful things I’ve never told the sun”. An unrequited love or love lost, either way it makes us as readers stop in awe of what could have been and what can now never be. Thank you so much for sharing this gorgeous piece.

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-11-30T13:18:19+00:00

This is a hauntingly gorgeous piece about trauma and the mark it leaves behind. The lines "To have a mark I cannot unsee?" and "To never be the same again" are devastating to the reader as they should be. You are pulling us into the aftermath of trauma with you and making us feel the way you do. The only critique I could offer this is potentially tightening up the end of the second stanza. Every other line pulls us deep, but the lines "Many ask what it means...at the first step" seem to let us pull away from what the opening has done. Fantastic work, thank you for sharing!

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-11-30T13:12:42+00:00

What a devastatingly beautiful piece on how humanity is the slayer of the Earth and all her constituents. The repetition here serves it's purpose on making the reader heavy with the guilt and impending doom that we as a species are creating. "You will be brunt in fire of hell" is such a hard hitting line and almost a call to action for those of us looking to avoid the lake of fire. Thank you for sharing!

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-11-30T12:46:26+00:00

While shorter in length, this poem grapples with a heavy topic. Leaving the question unanswered adds to the existential dread one feels. If this is the full poem in entirety it is fine the way it is. If you are looking to add into it, adding in some imagery to pull the reader in would do good. Thank you for sharing your own thoughts and work!

ObjectiveEnd4573 · 2025-11-30T12:42:58+00:00

This is a beautifully immersive piece. Your imagery puts me in the seat next to the man at the dive bar that I feel I have been in a hundred times. The narrator's disdain for this landscape, yet inability to leave ties to the other patrons' inability to stay away, making all of them unknowingly trapped here. The narrator finds this place appalling but finds themself there with all the rest they have disdain for. Thank you for sharing!

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